Very good poem. The first few lines I feel you could space them differently, but thats my opinion. (my style is very odd) For example if I was writing this I would change:
I felt the sun on my skin
I felt the chill in the air
to:
I felt the sun,
on my skin.
I felt the chill,
in the air.
Or i don't know. You can change it like that if you want, I don't mind. But I see potential in your writing! =)
-Cassie
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