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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi firefly_2, this was quite an enjoyable read. It caught my attention really well and the ending gave me a chuckle.
This line, however, "Sharon, my amazingly best and happily married with 4 children friend, had a plan." stood out me as a bit fluffy.
Other than that, I found it to be quite cohesive and a nice light-hearted read.
Good job!
Bec
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Smile* I see you are a bit of a newbie to this site.

This poem has such an excellent rhythm to it that is uninterupted throughout the entire piece, which I think is great.

The rhyme in this poem works very well, and feels very natural and breezy.

In the fourth stanza, last line (And bath the earth in new found light?) I think 'bath' should here be 'bathe'

But apart from that, this poem id very well written, and the meaning behind is shines through.

Good job-
StrawberryDreams (becxx)

PS- If you need any help or anything with the site, don't hesitate to ask :)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A bit different, and good :)

there were quite a few spelling errors( you might want to read through and edit for them)
but it was pretty good otherwise.
I think a new paragraph for 'walking next to some woods I started to hear...' because that is a different scene to the other half of the paragraph( paragraph2)

Hope my review helps in any way :)
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