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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very Nice! I felt like I've walked in those woods. Loved the cadence and flow of the words.
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Review of My Valentine  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very good! Love the emotional impact.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Aerow49,

Interesting writing for sure! I was thinking if you removed the "to" that was in between "call out ^to^ but you ignore them," and start the 'but' as a new line, it would maybe pace a little better.

This definitely has a depressive feel and works really well, I really enjoyed the last stanza how it counterpoints the previous writing to give it a very nice ending.

Great Job!
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