bejjinks's (bejjinks) Reviews

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11 Public Reviews Given

11 Total Reviews Given

Review Style

I'm flexible to give you the kind of review you ask for. You want me to focus on grammar, I can do that. You want me to focus on content, I can do that. I do tend to think about whether you're work is accomplishing what you intend it to. If you want to rile people up but your writing is too peaceful, I'll tell you.

I'm good at...

I'm good at grammar and style but I'm best at overall story structure. I can tell you where to begin and end a story and in what order the different parts of the story should be. Typically the best stories are mostly chronological but have some story parts strategically moved out of chronological sequence.

Favorite Genres

My favorite genres are spiritual, allegory, and relationship

Least Favorite Genres

My least favorite genres are pure action and horror

Favorite Item Types

I prefer reading interactives, prose or story

I will not review...

I probably won't review poetry or any writing that doesn't contain at least some spirituality or relationship issue. I also probably won't review superficial romances but would love a story about deeper relationships with greater loyalty.

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#4197427

Review of do you agree with gays

Review by bejjinks

Rated: E

| (2.0)

You need more options for "partially agree." It's the all or nothing stands that are causing all the controversy.

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#4197426

Review of Why! Why! Why!

Review by bejjinks

Rated: 13+

| (2.0)

The real reason is because ugly gay men and older gay men are so shunned even by other gay men that they go back into the closet.

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#4197315

Review of A Risky Lesson In Thankfulness

Review by bejjinks

Rated: E

| (1.5)

Good concepts but poor execution.

1.The first sentence is the most important. You must grab your reader's attention. Start with describing your emotional state instead of starting with describing the time.

2. It is wordy. I think it would be better to get rid of excess words. Shorter sentences are more lively. Often words that end in -ly can be deleted and make your sentences more dynamic.

3. It should be more descriptive. People will care more about the color of your bike than they will about the specific make, model and age of your bike. All adjectives should be used to say more than just a description. For example, the color of your bike says something about your personality.

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#4196798

Review of Writing.Com 101

for entry "When Your Paid Membership Expires"

Review by bejjinks

Rated: E

| (4.5)

The last question needs clarification. If I am gifted a paid membership, do I have to downsize when the gift expires?

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#4196123

Review of Slow Down

Review by bejjinks

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I like it. It's fun and mildly humorous. It's got a good rhythm that could easily be set to music.

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