This definitely has potential, though I would have liked to have seen more description. I get the feeling that they are meeting in a castle, but what are their surroundings like? What do the characters look like? I like the uniqueness, and I would really like to see this story grow. I have always been told "show, don't tell." I think that is the same sitchuation here. Even with my own story, I need to remember to add more description. Keep it up! Let me know when you add more!
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