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Review of Around the Bend  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Horrifically Funny. And seems quite under the umbrella of misfortune also.
Personal Experience:
i think such events have occurred with everybody at sometime in their course of life. as i get the essence of the narrative is: "God really does have a sense of humor."
Style & Form:
Both are fine.
Imagery:
Communicatively funny.
Tone:
Feels Self pity and definitely humorous.
Setting:
Countryside.
Liking:
i really loved the concept: God really does have a sense of humor,
Word Choice:
Exquisite.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Sure.
Overall:
A Good Read !

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
Quite Quite Emotional and touching too.
Personal Experience:
I was brought up with my maternal grandma, the whole Vignette set me see my golden old days again rolling in front of my eyes. it made me emotional.
Style & Form:
Excellent. The repetition of the phrase: Grandma Isn’t Happy, and then in last turning it upside down is a superb example of repetition, creating a magical effect.
Imagery:
Expressively vivid.
Tone:
Passionate and nostalgic.
Setting:
personal.
Liking:
i like the whole piece.
Word Choice:
cool.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Truly ! as it touched right to my heart.
Overall:
Two Thumbs Up !

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,

As i read your other things i found that you live in a countryside . And, most of the material i read of yours is about events related to country life.

The point i wanna emphasize here is: the passion, imagery and narration i find your such writings make me believe that penning down such things is your "Forte".

i really enjoyed this piece a lot. Especially the part where you describe the scenic beauty, the flow of water and the surroundings. Hats off.

Keep on Writing.

khaki


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Review of Rowdy Owls  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
i think it is a narration of an horrific event in a funny way. With a sigh of: Ahhhhh, the country life!
Personal Experience:
Oh! none. thanks God.
Style & Form:
Apt and narrative.
Imagery:
vivid and communicative.
Tone:
i perceive it is amusing.
Setting:
Quite personal and cultural with added mixture of country life.
Liking:
i like the last line the most. After reading whole it gave me an expression of certain irritation and satisfaction at the same time.
Word Choice:
O.K.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Overall:
O.k.

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Review of Coyote  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
Very Attaching. i found myself extremely delve deep into the narration.
Personal Experience:
None like that.
Style & Form:
Both are Eloquent and Expressive. i think form is quite biographical.
Imagery:
Vivid and communicating.
Tone:
i feel it is Sympathetic.
Setting:
Personal, Inquisitive.
Liking:
i like the most the comment: "but there was no possible way one could say that I had achieved some acceptance by them either"

It felt quite understanding and expressive in term of other's emotions.
Word Choice:
Fine enough to portray accordingly.
Flow & Rhythm:
Smooth and Catchy.
Any Recommendation:
None
Memorable:
Of course.
Overall:
A Wonderfully refreshing read.

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
Very Touching !
Personal Experience:
None.
Style & Form:
Both are exquisite. The narration is eloquent as it correctly captures the thought lying in the mind of the author and hence communicating one's emotion to the reader effectively.

i should say Masterfully done !
Imagery:
Very vivid and Expressive enough to become a life like picture in front of the reader's eye.
Tone:
Mixed Feeling (what i have felt) like of Happiness, Luck, Grief, Nostalgia, and very dominating in the end is Optimistic.
Setting:
Seems Personal and Cultural.
Liking:
I like the most the ending line of it:

The two hopeful butterflies spread their wings and flew beyond the highest zenith of the sky visible to a normal eye.

The line is quite poetical in tone.
Word Choice:
Appropriate.
Flow & Rhythm:
Flows well with rhythm of life and death.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Truly !
Overall:
Two Thumbs Up !

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Review of Blossoms Maligned  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
Touching
Personal Experience:
yes.
Style & Form:
Eloquent.
Imagery:
Vivid
Tone:
Romantic.
Setting:
Emotional.
Word Choice:
Cool.
Flow & Rhythm:
Moving.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Yes
Overall:
Good.
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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Emotional Feel:
Celebrating.
Personal Experience:
Yes as the time proceeds.
Style & Form:
Very communicative and pleasing.
Imagery:
Cool.
Tone:
Singing and springing.
Setting:
Eventual.
Liking:
i like the most: It’s time to party, a time for fun,
Decorate the house, put up the tree,
It’s time to start to put down all guns
It’s time to let the dove of peace fly free.
Word Choice:
Expressive.
Flow & Rhythm:
Musical.
Any Recommendation:
i personally feel the following line bit hard in sound regarding a song: And we’re madly dashing
Memorable:
like Christmas.
Overall:
A good READ !

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Review of Multivalence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Emotional Feel:
Creatively Inspiring.
Personal Experience:
i truly belong to the thought of William Carlos William.
Style & Form:
Comprehensive.
Imagery:
vivid
Tone:
Reflecting.
Setting:
Artistic.
Liking:
i like the most ""A poem is never finished, only abandoned."
- Paul Valery (1871 - 1945)
Word Choice:
Suitable.
Flow:
Well managed.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Not only, but i would claim this writing to be most historic in my life as it has given me the strength and helped me in removing confusions regarding creative process.
Overall:
A Must Read.

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
Informative and historic.
Style & Form:
Both are well managed.
Imagery:
though not story like yet very convincing.
Tone:
Patriotic.
Setting:
Homeland and Industrial.
Liking:
i like the way the information is categorized. i am really amazed to know that Australia provides wine to 80 countries.
Word Choice:
Wonderful !
Any Recommendation:
if font could have been bit bigger or spacing could be done between lines, it would have been better readable.
Memorable:
yes.
Overall:
An Inspiring Read !

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Review of Moments of Gold  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Oh ! it makes me feel happy by putting smile on my lips.
Personal Experience:
Yes with my children. But here is another angle of knowledge regarding kids psychology.
Style & Form:
Both are Fine.
Imagery:
Vivid.
Tone:
Calming.
Setting:
Very personal and so much Emotional.
Liking:
i like the whole scenario.
Word Choice:
Perfect.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
As an increase to my knowledge.
Overall:
Well Done !

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel:
Very Touching. Though i am a man myself.
Personal Experience:
i have read and seen movies. Yet i did not find anything in real life (thanks God). but i believe there are many examples of such incidents in every culture and country.
Style & Form:
Both are heart rending.
Imagery:
Quite Clear.
Tone:
Alarming !
Setting:
Personal and Emotional yet Universal.
Liking:
i like the line: fear cripples you, just like shame.
Word Choice:
Fine.
Any Recommendation:
None
Memorable:
Truly !
Overall:
Two Thumbs up ! Due to the courage of the author which allows her to write on such obnoxious things. Such things should be highlighted to girls so that they may aware of the Evil in Men. It is one of the most necessary education, a mother should provide to her daughter.

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Review of The Perfect Wife  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Sadly Moving.
Personal Experience:
Yes, i saw my mother alike.
Style & Form:
Both are Gripping.
Imagery:
Thoroughly communicating the theme.
Tone:
Bit Ironic too (i feel). yet very sympathizing.
Setting:
Personal and Emotional.
Liking:
i like the whole composition with all its manifestations.
Word Choice:
Quite Masterfully done.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Of Course !
Overall:
A Wonderful Read !

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
It makes me sad
Personal Experience:
None. But i do think that how a life would be behind the bars. And, i believe you have marvelously captured the life of a writer in the cell. Now it is quite clear.
Style & Form:
Both are inspiring and communicating.
Imagery:
Though only sad one yet quite expressive.
Tone:
Self Discovering (what i feels)
Setting:
Personal.
Liking:
i like the whole scenerio. it reminds me one of the great movies i have ever seen "The Shashawnk Redemption".
Word Choice:
Expressive.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Definitely.
Overall:
Two Thumbs Up !

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Review of The Second Prayer  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
It pierces right through my heart.
Personal Experience:
Not directly as such.
Style & Form:
Both are Eloquent.
Imagery:
Inspiringly Communicative.
Tone:
Religious, Social and personal.
Setting:
Social and in relation to homeland.
Liking:
i like the whole fabric of the composition. the connecting of one thought with another.the issue of black community is quite sacred with me as i am a fan of Martin Luther King Jr.
Word Choice:
Superb.
Flow & Rhythm:
Excellent.
Any Recommendation:
None
Memorable:
Of Course.
Overall:
A Marvel.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Very Questioning and Reflecting.
Personal Experience:
Not that much.
Style & Form:
Both Eloquent.
Tone:
Meditative.
Setting:
Personal and Emotional.
Liking:
i like the Question: Did the Lord give to me a helping hand?
Word Choice:
Superb.
Flow & Rhythm:
Very well maintained.
Any Recommendation:
If in another poem the answers could be written.
Memorable:
Yes.
Overall:
Well Done !

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Review of Defeat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Life like !
Personal Experience:
Many a times.
Style & Form:
Concise and Purely Cinquain.
Imagery:
Vividly Expressive.
Tone:
Feels dejected.
Setting:
The way of Life.
Liking:
I like the brevity. which is a difficult task to achieve.
Word Choice:
Expertly done.
Flow & Rhythm:
Moving.
Any Recommendation:
None.
Memorable:
Of Course.
Overall:
A Creative one !

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Review of Almost Fifty-One  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Refreshingly touching.
Personal Experience:
Almost at last three birthdays.
Style & Form:
Seems Free verse.
Imagery:
Sensual with abundance of visual images.
Tone:
Discovering.
Setting:
Personal.
Liking:
i like the last Four lines, especially the last line.
Word Choice:
Fine.
Flow & Rhythm:
Fluent and freely rhythmic.
Any Recommendation:
None
Memorable:
As like age.
Overall:
A Good Read.

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Review of My Love for You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Emotional Feel:
lovely strange.
Personal Experience:
Being a lover it feels very personal.
Liking :
i like the third line, the simile of Eagle and its soaring like the heart of the lover for the sight of the love.
Any Recommendation:
you said it poem but wrote it in prose form. just if it is broke in lines where new sentence starts. it would be visually fine poem also.
Memorable :
Definitely.
Overall:
A passionate read.

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Emotional Feel:
very romantic.
Personal Experience:
many a times.
Liking :
the describing lover as a ghost, it seems that the lover is feeling himself as ghost because he is away from his love.
Any Recommendation:
if the last line could me more simplified because i could not get the concept of feeling the wind. if you could increase my knowledge by telling.
Memorable :
Certainly.
Overall:
Intensely loving.

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Emotional Feel:
Biographical.
Personal Experience:
yes as i read about him.
Liking :
anything on Shakespeare or about him is worth liking.
Any Recommendation:
it seems the poem is in between two genres, poem and prose. it is half achieved poem and half achieved prose. Neither complete.
Memorable :
it would have been more if its form is being re-crafted.
Overall:
good work

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Review of Just a Thought  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Emotional Feel:
touching.
Personal Experience:
Some time.
Liking :
its intensity though it is in prose.
Any Recommendation:
if it is composed in free verse (in poetic form) it would have been far attractive.
Memorable :
yes it is.
Overall:
a good concept to read.

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Review of In the Bus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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i do not know why you wrote every poem in such a hurry, though you have done a good job. and, if you have done it in complete consideration then it would have been far better because you got talent of writing poetry. i like the ending twist of the thought. Somewhere rhythm is felt managed. otherwise it is a kind of free verse. which is also good.

Good work ! keep writing.

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Review of Hungry for it all  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Emotional Feel
poetically innovative.

Personal Experience
Not as much.

Liking
i like the concept with its unique description.

Any Recommendation
if it to be called written in haiku it should meet familiar form standard of haiku which is 5-7-5 syllable requirement. otherwise i would prefer that you should not mention it so. it will raise the expectation of the reader and failing which would create negative impact.

Memorable:
of course.

Overall
A well thought piece of poetry.

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Review by khaki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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it is a softly arousing, emotional poem. the task of picturing the beautiful physicality in words is marvelously achieved. the whole composition shows your talent for writing poetry. Only last stanza seems bit out of control. May be it is because of the fact that action of the poem there has reached its top and uncontrollable.

i liked first stanza the most. In second line of second stanza (if possible) put the word "to" before the word "down" then it seems more rhythmic. (it is only a suggestion)

Overall it is a yummius poem.

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