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Review of Fear at Midnight  Open in new Window.
Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Title: Nice title

Description: Good description of poem.

Content: The uncertainty is well written.

Kudos: Good imagery.

Suggestions/Corrections: None.

Overall Impression: This was well written.

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Review of Santa's Crisis  Open in new Window.
Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Title: Accurate title.

Description: Interesting description.

Content: I liked this story about Santa's crisis. It was creatively done and fun to read.

Kudos: I liked the elf going out and surveying the boys that were in the street. The dialogue was funny.

Suggestions/Corrections:

Over the years he remembered Santa as being a jolly old elf but lately he had become a cynical old man. a comma should be after years.

Overall Impression: This was a cute story. Santa's midlife crisis being that there is no more christmas spirit was definitely creative.

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Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Title: Accurate title.

Description: Accurate description.

Content: This was a cute poem.

Kudos: This was very relatable. As many pens as I have around my house, I can never find one when I need it!

Suggestions/Corrections: A few of the lines needed questions marks.

Overall Impression: This was a cute and relatable poem. *Smile*

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Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Title: Very accurate title.

Description: This is what made me want to read your story.

Content: This was a touching story.

Kudos: It's always nice to know that people still care about less fortunate people. You did a great job of telling about your most memorable holiday.

Suggestions/Corrections: thank yous there should be an apostrophe before the s.

Overall Impression: I liked reading about your most memorable holiday. It was a very touching story.

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Review of Four  Open in new Window.
Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Title: Very accurate title for this story.

Description: I liked this description. It's what made me want to read your story.

Content: This was an enjoyable read.

Kudos: I did enjoy the evil twist at the end. *Smile*

Suggestions/Corrections:

not good enough for the elite Villagers tastes an apostrophe should be before the s in villagers.

Overall Impression: I liked this story about the Four. The ending was definitely a good one.

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Review of Sinful Chocolate  Open in new Window.
Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Title: Nice title. It fits the story.

Description: Great job on the description. It's what made me want to read your story. *Smile*

Content: This was very interesting since it was from the view of a chocolate bar.

Kudos: I liked how the chocolate bar was excited about being bought, and how you described his neighbors as being disgruntled since they've been on the shelves for weeks.

Suggestions: I found two punctuation errors:

In the description, there needs to be an apostrophe before the s in bars.

They were fine as neighbors but they moved quickly this time of year. - there should be a comma before but.

Overall Impression: I liked this unique story about a chocolate bar's most romantic day. Great job! *Smile*

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Review of Severed  Open in new Window.
Review by Mel Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,

I enjoyed reading your poem. You did a great job expressing how much you missed your husband. It was original and well written. The imagery was spooky, but well thought out. You should add a third genre so more people will be able to access it. Maybe tragedy or artistic. Thank you for sharing and write on! *Smile*

Melissa
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