That was good. It moved quickly. The prose of it flowed with a brilliant quickness that made the reader think. I of course thought she was a dead ghost coming home. :) Just my mileage. Very good story. I liked how the husband figured it out and decided to do something about it. I also liked the wife being the one having the affair and not the other way around. Good story. I think I might have to write a ghost story now.
My only complaint, it is so short. I understand that it was submitted for a 100 word challenge. The feelings you invoked in your words was good. My only ping was this the flow from the first paragraph to the secound was too jarring. It does not flow as well as it should.
The flow of this is beautiful. I also love the choice of formatting. It helps elevate the story. The give and take between the shaman and the spirit talking to him is flowing. I love how the spirit keep saying what it needs to say even as the shaman wants to know who and what it is that is talking to him. Very good bit of poetry I enjoyed the prose.
My only question is this: Will there be more?
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