Your story's off to a great start. Ace and Luna happily begin their adventure together. I look forward to reading your subsequent chapters to see how their personalities develop. One thing I found a bit strange is that Ace "dashed into the tent" to get clothes for Luna -- but later when time to retire, they set up the tent. Does the tent somehow need additional setting up for sleeping?
Yet your writing is quite picturesque. I can imagine the scenes as if they were illustrated. Great work.
Excellent, well-researched article helped me appreciate Womens' contribution to our lives. Your writing captured well how these women labored with skill and determination against the headwinds of discrimination. Reading your article makes me feel good.
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