It's a lovely poem. I have spent the past week with my little nephew and I can back-up all the stanzas.
It's a good idea, presenting the world through the eyes of a baby. I have always believed that, the more viewpoints you get on something, the better you come to understand that thing.
This is a good poem. I like the ways you describe love, as if it's seen by many points of view, not just one. And it has a tinge of mathematics in it, which makes it even more appealing to me. Lovely similes... and the curing of hate by love is a wonderful manner of promoting it.
Good simile. We're so often thrown away by life's incontrollable whims... But one must live... lest complaining be irrelevant. As Lord Tennyson put it: "'tis better to have loved and lost/than never to have loved at all."
The message is really good. But you should pay more attention to the choice of words. I find the idea similar to some of my own poems, especially in the educational aspect. Keep up the good work!
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