Dear Crazy Writer,
Your words are intense your grammar and punctuation are immaculate. You did and amazing job using personification in this poem it was a intense read. First to last line in it grasps your attention.Thank you for sharing keep on writing you are great at it.
Dear Itchy Water,
I have read your piece and am here to offer my views and opinions take what works for you and disregard the rest.Death so many fear it so many tempt it so many calling it out.Death is the same as living its natural and must come.This speaks of how one lives in fear of death and more fear of what's after death.These are all normal human thoughts and emotions.Your piece is intense real and questions you ask are what many ponder.You did an amazing job discussing this.
Dear TeenageLoser,
I have read your piece and am here to offer my views and opinions take what works for you disregard the rest.I found your use of personification intense.One thing I may change would be the capitalization on the beginning of sentences.(Although it does not take away from your piece). Your similes were more than a visual piece but also heartfelt.The intense emotion makes the gravity of the situation more intense.This is a very well written piece as it has many great styles in it.A true artist good job.
Dear Crying Shannon,
Wow this is a very emotional intense piece.How you speak of the depths of depression and sorrow the longing for a better morrow.My favorite part is how you ask will u help or understand another that feels that way.It is my favorite for our struggles can help others not to feel so alone and pass on how we've grown.Thank you so much for allowing me to read this piece its amazing in every way.May you continue to grow each day.
Dear strtcuckoo,
I have read your piece and am here to offer you my review.Your piece is deep intense and full of questions lol good job.Who we are is who we choose to be and by accepting ourselves as we are is the only way to truly be free.Worse thing we as humans do is assume just as you may presume no one cares there are many who care so deeply yet do not know how to discuss such things you did a great job thank you for sharing.
Dear CountryMom,
I have read your piece and think you most definitely have the gift of writing wow.The way you use similes the comparison writing all is intense and fueled by beauty.You words speak of the beauty the beauty of mother nature .Thank you for sharing Job well done.
Dear MagicMoneyMike,
This piece is very very intense your words were flowing off the page steadily.This sounds so true to life.When your as down as you can be then there presents an opportunity for it's not your worth your value that makes you worthwhile it's what you do with what you have even if it's a kick my sign tapped to your back.Lol I really enjoyed this cause I found it so realistic>Thank you so much for sharing and blessed be.
Dear Thomas Seeker,
The flow is steady and nice the emotion is intense while the message clear.Your words would make one feel hopeful after reading them.I am grateful to have read this piece.Thank you.
Dear WinterMistress,
I read your piece and wow you really have an art going here your words are so intense.It's a hard thing isn't it to face your past and realize that's where it stays and we cannot carry the weight from it with us.I really enjoyed this thank you.
Dear WinterMistress,
Bravo five stars for you this piece speaks of a hardship many never know .The hardship of living with turmoil in ones mind peace is often the hardest thing to find.Often memories are of tragic and eventful times remain a constant a struggle.Your emotion was felt your flow intense and your message ever so clear.Thank You for sharing.
Dear Rose M,
I read your piece from reading this one could assume you are a very religious or spiritual person although I'm not one to presume anything.Your flow is strong your message clear and your words very powerful as you express yourself through your words the emotion flows off your page very well done.Good Job.Thank You.
Dear Sherri,
Now who wouldn't want to feel this way wow very intense emotion.I love how your pieces have such a graceful flow to them while maintain g your intense emotion.Your perspective is a natural beauty in itself.I enjoyed this very much thank you.
Dear Sherri Gibson,
Wow congratulations I was captivated by the first line and the flow had my interest throughout. My most favorite part of this was the last line.The intensity in how you end it makes is so strong.Thank you for sharing.
Dear Puja-Miss u,
Wow not only was your flow exceptional your rhythmical pace was astounding.I found your piece very philosophical but also spiritual.It speaks very strongly in many different ways.Job well done thank you.
Dear iva*mae,
Wow you are amazing talented your work needs no review lol.The only thing I would change would maybe be the capitalization on the first word of the lines,otherwise I found no errors.Your piece reminds me of how we have a conflict sometimes and struggle silently and thou others seem aware they are oblivious the true struggles within.You are very very talented I feel privileged to have read your work thank you.
Dear Iva *Mae,
I've read your piece and am here to offer my opinion.I found that your emotions and intent was clear.Was as I call short and sweet.You meant what you said and said what you meant.Thank you for sharing.Sorry for the pain that stems from such sorrow.
Dear Joy-in snowball,
I have read your piece wow your emotion is spilling out through the imagery used in your words the similes make your statements stand out so much.I found this so intense that it sounds like your mother actually used to be an artist herself.Congrats you did amazing.
Dear Julie D,
I have read your piece and am here to offer my opinion.Isn't it hard when we seem unable to make certain decisions at certain times and when our timing fails oh how we feel we've failed.I found you piece in depth personal deep true and good.The only thing I might change is capitalization on couple lines otherwise job well done.
Liam,
Short sweet direct .It astounds and amazes me how a few words can show the intensity of another's emotion.You did a wonderful job thank you for sharing.
Dear Liam,
I have read your piece and am here to give my opinions.I have found no grammatical errors.Your flow was steady and words spoken wisely.In life many voices nag at us and it is all how we process and from your writing I see you process very well.My favorite line is No solider ever won a war without being committed to the fight.The intense emotion in this line sums up your whole piece.Congrats good job
Dear Summer Wind,
May I thank you I was doing reviews for the dream team and came onto this and wow.Thank you because I find it so out of place leaving my two cents so I feel like Paula Abdul on American idol always saying nice things for I always think it's an art and everyone does it in there own way not necessarily in certain grammar or proper form.Lol so bravo also I did find your piece spoke with much vindication.Job very well done
Dear Summer Wind,
Wow this was a very intense piece.It speaks of something many choose not to discuss.I felt the emotion through your poem right away the intent was clear the emotion intense.I found no grammatical errors.I found your use of simile's made the image being presented more intense.
Dear Marcus,
Hello there I've read your poem found no errors. I actually thought it was a very deep piece.
These are questions and situations people often find themselves in. You took the emotion and soaked your ink in it as the flow of intensity thru visual emotion is seen here.I really enjoyed reading you piece and felt I could relate as I think many can.Good job .Happy Holidays.
Dear strlcuckoo (32),
I have read your poem and am here to offer my opinion.I love when intensity can be found in short poems a few lines.When an author can emotionally capture you.Well guess what for me you have done just that.Sometimes it is too hard too let go so we hang on .Often we don't remember the bad or hard times for in our minds eye we choose to cherish the good moments.Great job found no errors thank you for sharing great job.
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