I'm no poetry expert, but I found this poem absolutely amazing.
Lines such as "By parents who weren't parents,
but were children and were lost," are really original and thoughtful.
You grab the reader's attention from the first line, and don't let go for a second.
One of the best short stories I have read. Very descriptive, gets the reader very interested in the characters and brings in the final terror just at the right time.
Thank you for this well written story. I won't forget it in a long time.
I apologize for not coming up with many places for improvement, but I sincerely think there aren't many.
The only little aspect I would add or change, is the fact that the main characters seemed to know well that the gunshots were mad school kids with guns. Even though the class was quickly informed, there would be more confusion, in my opinion.
Maybe a small sentence or two describing how Sarah had seen on the news the many school killings that had happened in the past would be in place.
This is the only thing I could pick out, and it isn't at all serious.
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