I like this, I imagine there could often be an inherent tendency to be sentimental or indulgent when writing about someone as close as one's wife, but you kept it informative and honest; each line showed a new aspect of her and you presented a strong and dynamic image of her. It wasn't just flamboyant gushing! The only two lines I didn't like personally were 'your embrace warms my soul', because it doesn't really tell you anything; it's not an entirely tangible concept, and 'your love is my haven' seemed similarly lofty. Think the poem would lose nothing in content without those lines and could make the poem stronger being more concise. That's just me though, hope this is helpful
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