Every night he ventures forth, his quest is not to fail,
From the shadow of the trees he watches, in the light so ghostly pale,
He knows when you have seen him, he knows when you’re aware;
He’ll melt into the quiet night and leave you wondering there.
That's my favourite stanza! Of course, this is a wonderful poem because all throughout, there's this feeling of eeriness: no doubt, created by your excellent word selection. There's also this wonderful rhythm in this poem; and I'd congratulate you especially on this, because I'm incapable of pulling off something like this, actually.
Kudos, and keep up the good work
This is quite possibly the single most helpful article I've ever read concerning poetry.
The second myth helped me the most: I suppose because I need to work on that the hardest.
Also, as for the 4th myth, how much of that applies to fiction as a whole?
Oh! This is simply GREAT...I loved the rhythm of this piece: it flows wonderfully! And the choice that you went with is simply brilliant: "I simply spread my wings and fly"
Great job, and keep writing!
Beautiful...simply MUSIC that (the pun very much intended). What got me to read it first of all was the subject itself (I've been thinking a lot about the connection between music and emotion lately: as in how simple notes from an inanimate object can convey complex human feelings): so I jumped the first time I read your summary.
Reading it, I wasn't dissapointed. I liked the way you wove in the songs within the poem; and the IT part was brilliantly pulled off. The only 'suggestion' (and it's hardly even that) that I have is: perhaps you can change the IT into a bold or an italicized 'it' instead? It's just that IT reminds me way too much of 'Information Technology'; but that's just my weirdness; please feel free to disregard this.
In conclusion, this poem is a work of art.
Hello! It's me- Caramir. I think,this is what they meaan when they talk about self love-the kind that isn't narcissic. My favourite lines would be: "I can’t love anyone for real
Until I truly love me
I can not make others feel
Love until I love the reflection that I see" I really can't agree with you more.
And I love the child like quality of this line:"I will admire myself down to my toes
Not to be naughty" All in all, I couldn't agree more with the message, and I love the skill with which you wrote this!
Good Luck and lots of love,
caramir
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