I thought that this piece was pretty good, with some new ideas, and a great Lead Character. The sentance's flowed, and the characters seemed genuine. My only advice is two things actually: 1. Do more show than tell. and 2. You have a great set-up for a story. I hope that the plot will reflect the potential of this piece, and not more of the same. Good luck !
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