Hey there! I'm new to this, so sorry if my review's a bit odd.
Having personally struggled with depression for a number of years, I was really excited to read someone else's view of it - and I have to say, the initial description was spot on.
As you mentioned in your footnote, the concept of "Depression" and "Happiness" being a choice seemed a bit strange to me - but I think it worked. I would recommend perhaps making your direction clearer. It became a little confusing at the end, with the mention of the postman and the money. Perhaps change the paragraphing or wording a little bit?
Personally, I'd have loved it if you played around with the Depression part a little more. The language you used there was fantastic.
Best of luck, and this was a lovely little piece~
Crow x
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