What's your concept of perfect? We just voted for change, I for one have had enough change. Faithfulwriter what do you want to do about the people? why are you so concerned about others and change? Who are you meant to be?
Your poem is sad. Sounds like you need a break. Love and relationships are hard, they take much more than most people have to give. Are they worth it? You bet they are. Life is what you make of it. Eternity is to come, so make sure you are ready for he who created you.
Nice thoughts. I think your piece is speaking as God. Then the piece is speaking as the created its a little confusing in the reading. Then you seem to confuse God the creator withe creation as if they are one. I believe that God created all things and is above all. He is not his creation in my opinion. The piece could be restructured to be a better representation of God the Creator and God himself.
I am bored with the usual television programing these days too. The language in prime time is appalling. Manners and edicut is a thing of the past. Chivarly is not passed down from father to son or taught in any class that I am aware of.
Maybe this is our saving grace. Television is so boring these days just maybe enough people will become bored and turn to writing and reading . Wouldn't it be nice if Chivarly and manners a long with dignaty could be re-discovered and become popular again. We can only hope.
Your poem leaves me wondering if you are speaking to a person right next to you or into the night (no one being there). You could do more to give the reader a chance to at least focus on your idea.
Good poem. Remember that the path to heaven is narrow and hard to travel, only a few will find it. Those that think that there are many ways to heaven will be surprized when Christ says I never knew you.
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