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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for entering the Short Story part of this 9-11 contest. You gave me everything I was hoping to read, and more!

You gave me imagery of looking through your eyes of what you saw, felt and even the confusion that we all felt that day. Then the realization that it was....then....real? What could you say to your Dad that was thinking the same thing?!

What really got my attention in your story was this: Is was a part of our history. You reminded me of my ancestors, of how they told the stories to each of us children of our past. This is how we kept our beginnings/past alive. We didn't write our information down about what happened as time past, the Story-teller of the Tribe would pass on the information what we were suppose to remember about our past HISTORY.

It was later that a man from Spain came over, taught us a syllabary of our language, He was the one who wrote the History down first in writing.

Thank you for the History lesson, and keep it going for the generations to come, because they will be running this country when they're grown. It is more believable when you tell a story of something that you experienced yourself.

As a great Short Story, you've won second place, but....with not one, but two MB's.
GPs will be sent with this review. Thank you so much for the reminder of why I still do this contest when I am able to be here! Because it is and was a real part of our HISTORY!.


Well done *ThumbsupL* Keep writing, never stop, Write On! *Bigsmile**ThumbsupR*


Cissy from NAFP Group
*Peace**Heart*
Member and supporter of many Groups


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Review of 9-11  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you so much for entering the 9-11 contest. It means so much to me that you would take time to write something new for it. I will be giving out my decisions within a 24 hour period.

Many blessings to you dear Lady, Thank you for your service in our Armed forces! *Salute*

*Bigsmile*

Cissy


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Review of Memories of 9-11  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
You my dear, sent a shiver through to my spine! This story told as through your eyes of that very day of what you felt, what you were doing, and how it made you feel, how it affected you and your family! Oh my goodness!!! You brought it all back to me of how I felt, the shock of disbelief that it was real, then the realization that it was. Then to mention the Pentagon being attacked as one of our flights had been highjacked with the people that had taken that plane trip lost their lives as well. When time passes, sometimes some important facts may dwindle in our memories, like the high jacking of an American flight full of people taking what they probably thought as a routine everyday flight. Not knowing they were about to loose their lives, never to see their loved ones again. Thank you so much for the memories, and of how thankful I am to be alive! *Heart**Angel*


This is a story that I will not forget! Very well written, kept me captivated, with tears rolling down my face as I read the raw imagery written before me that was so true.


Many blessings dear one!

*Heart*


Cissy

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(I'll be getting back to you shortly) *Smile*


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your free verse poem of 9-11 was very well written, and was a pleasure to read. There was sadness as well as happiness for a better tomorrow for the life that we have and for the survivors. At the same time you wrote exactly what I was looking for....just to remember 9-11! You know? Don't forget, if not for the grace of the Creator, that life that was lost could be one of us, and to be thankful that at this very moment, we're not being bombed. Thank You so much for putting it so gracefully well written into poetry form. Many blessings dear one.


*Heart*

Cissy


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I couldn't have found a better group to get involved in than this one. I love the promotion of all people's writing/contest etc. You're doing a wonderful thing here at WDC. I'm sure many do appreciate it more than they express to you. Bless you for what you are doing for all of us!

Many blessings
*Heart*

Cissy
NAFP Group
Affiliated/Member/Supporter of many groups. WaDo!
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Review of Yellow  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
You actually surprised me with this piece. From the title and description, I wasn't thinking of what you wrote here. The surprise of this poem surprised me in a good way, detailing it to the end what the title, "Yellow " really meant to you. I'm sure no one would have guessed this piece to be so simplistic, and straight to the point, easy enough that small children would understand. Your writing here had me guessing until I got to the part where what " YELLOW " meant to you and the many different kinds of yellow of many different things, places, and objects. Very well written. A simple great read for me.*ThumbsUpL*Coming from This kind of writing is a piece that I'd like to curl up and have several pieces, and have either a hot cup of coffee or hot

Thank you much for sharing your writing with all of us to read, to enjoy. You dear one have the natural talent for great writing. Pick what feels good to you, then write in your style, not worrying about how people will perceive, just trust in yourself, your ability, and " Loveof your writing skill, then go for it! *Bigsmile*

You're a very good Author, don't allow anyone to ever get into your head and
Well domrmake you think, " I"m not good enough, it was . Very enjoyable to read.
Well written, I saw no errors anywhere. A very good read.

Keep Writing, Wright On ! *ThumbsUpL* I just wanted to say..
. Until we read again, Just wanted you to know... I liked what you had to say.

Many blessings,
*Heart*
"A friend of WDC"

Cissy
NAFP Group
Affiliated with many groups and support.
Have a great morning/evening. {e:wol

Sincerely

Cissy

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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank You Neva, this was indeed a very touching and emotional piece.I did like how you accomplished in writing into this piece about the twin towers. You brought an emotional lump into my throat and a tear in my eye. Thank You!! *Cry*

*ThumbsUpL* "WRITE ON!

Much love to you dear one.*Smile*

*Heart*

Cissy


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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Soldier_Mike, I loved your trip down memory lane with this Thanksgiving story. It was in perfect form, and kept my attention.
Only one problem with this story. Either there has to be another part to finish this up ...( because you left me hanging *BigSmile* ) or add a little more to your story, more detail. It's a wonderful memory... but I am an avid reader, and I do so much love to read a very good story such as yours. I am blessed to have been able to read it, and Thank you for sharing a " childhood story" with us all here. *ThumbsUpL* Write On!
Many Blessings to you and yours,
Sincerely a "WDC" friend,
*Delight*
Cissyccr
From my little corner of this world...NAFP
Supporting many groups, to name a few... Angel Army, The Witches House, Bards Hall, Simply Positive, Rising Stars, Traditional Poetry Group and many, many more.
Have a wonderful day, and hope to see the second part to this Thanksgiving Story...*Bigsmile*


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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for all of this information. It honestly helps a lot of us who are gone for a long period of time and things change. This up-dated material helps those of us who still like to write from time to time and still haven't mastered the art of the correct writing way for our writing to be a good read to the on looker/reader. Many blessings to one and all.

Sincerely
Cissyccr *Heart*
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Review of The Witch's House  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your Group's house is done in a most inviting way. Hope all is well there where you are, many blessings to you all!☺
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Review of A Shaman's Faith  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
My dear powerful writing Dave, I am not your average reviewer *Rolleyes**Laugh*...I follow my heart when I read anyone's writings *Smile*. I read each person's writings as if it were bought off of the store book shelf, a completed published novel. In saying this, I do not help much in the way of grammar *Pthb* , but I will help in being the most honest person you could ever meet. I will tell you honestly what I think of your story/poetry/etc. *ThumbsUpL* *ThumbsUpR*

In what I felt as I read this story....*Shock* my, oh my!!! Absolutely AWESOME! It is a story in which I can relate to, you would know if you heard of me...lol...(hopefully good hahaha)...

The Shamans wavering faith in himself is completely understandable, many have gone through this and still do as the dark shadows attacks because of the strong faith in the Creator they have. One question? What was the Shamans name? It would help to identify with the person on a more personal basis if you could put a name to each character that you write about in all of your writings, just my own opinion, no problems if you take that little advise or not, it is your story....write what you feel, most of the time if you do, you can't go wrong. It is something that I have learned from many WDC very nice writer's whom have helped me in my own writing errors when I write.

As far as the reason of the low faith in the Shamans self, their light they give off has been attacked....That is why they are attacked even more than others, but when his main totem/spirit guide took over, the "Bear", that was dead on as far as a Native person allowing their Spirit guides/ Totems guide their lives with the Creator at the head. I loved the part where you reveled Mother Earth of the unloading of his pack. For in that pack are items taken from Mother Earth in the healing of people's body, mind and spirit.

*QuestionV* One other question? The way you left it at the end...it was open to do a series of short stories that would follow this one and tell what happened to the Shaman. ? Did the sickness befall Him as he took it away from the man in the bed?...Was the Man in the bed in His vision that was wrapped in a spiders webbing, was it the man in the bed? Or was it Himself? There is so much potential to continue short stories that could follow this one...( along the lines of the "Green Mile"... a series of eight short stories that follow each other until the end) Your story... Overall, Great Story, I enjoyed it immensely!

The most wonderful story I have read in some time....I've been gone for a little while and I have to say as my first read coming back home here to WDC, this was a blessing, pure excitement in the reading of this story of such a very, very good writer, and it was as well a great home coming present to read for me.

I saw only one error which I mentioned, I read out of the pleasure of the enjoyment of reading something new, for me there were no flaws except that one part, insignificant part surely to many...that is only my opinion though, take of it as you wish...please dear young Sir, DO NOT STOP WRITING! Write more and more and more. I am a fan, well done, Write On! *ThumbsUp*Waiting for the next short story if you plan on making this a series...*Wink*

Many blessings on you and your wonderful writings...
A Family of Writing.com, a friend...

Sincerely,
Cissy


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Review of The Witchy Cat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I think this is superfantastic!!!! WOW Webbie, you are Artist! I love this, awesome image, and I love the tee-pee scattered around the lodge too. The spear set it off completely...great job on this image, really beautiful!
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Review of Days go by  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Kayla_Burns92 Author Icon ...I read everything you had written in your port so far, *Bigsmile* then I saw the title of this one piece that just the title spoke to me. I do believe that everyone has had their own turmoil in our life times. You managed to tell it like it is about turmoil, but with a beautiful rhyming and rhythm that was outstanding as far as myself as a reader.

*Smile* I am reviewing only because I love to read new/old authors, but I also want to see your talent, and if there was anything that would teach me something that would help me too
in case I decided to write again.

*Delight* You have a very good talent here hon., honest, and it is a great thing that you came to writing.com to hone your skills before you decide to publish. There isn't a better plan on the internet to go for a writer than writing.com.

*Gift* You'll get more outta this website than any that you might have been on so far or will ever go to. This place is the place that will encourage your writing, and you will find some very friendly people here that will help you in any area that you may need to better become the writer that you want to be, and become.

*Wink* You remind me a little of me when I came on here for the first time...(i)[the ABAB rhyming]{/i}...this piece shows me that you have what it takes to become a really great writer. DON'T STOP!!! You are able to tell a short story in your poetry and to me that is a good writer that can relay what you are feeling/seeing/touching, etc. in a rhyming method, that is something that is hard to do...do not think that everyone can do such a thing. They can't!

*Worry* Sorry if you are feeling this way as you described in your piece here, if you ever need to let your hair down and talk, I'm on and off of here for the most part., I am able to come back again for a while...*Delight*...I have been in this place that you have described....once you have wrote and let out a lot of the painful memories inside of you, and painful things that you have been through...trust me on this, hon., you are going to write like crazy and the more that you write and get helpful reviews, you only get better.

Thank you for allowing this open for all of us here at WDC to read *Smile**Hand1*
Many blessings to you and yours....DON'T STOP WRITING!!!!!! *Thumbsup**Thumbsup*

Cissy

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"Dare to imagine, hope for a greater tomorrow, pray for world peace, & always follow your dreams." Quote by: Cissy Reliford


*Thumbsup*Well done...WRITE ON! *Bigsmile*
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Review of Frog  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yeah....leave it up to you to write a really fun poem!!! Franky, this is off the blasted CHAIN!!!!!!
Since I know how your twisted mind works...this is just too funny.

I saw no errors, your poem was done is the style of something I saw in Shelleya's work shop.
Can't remember the name but you do excellent form poetry, great job! *Thumbsup*

Keep Writing! " WRITE ON! "

Many blessings,
Cissy
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In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Shock* I am so sorry that it took me so long in coming by to read your writings. I have had some trouble here at home, but it seems to be fixing it self out as I am typing this.

This piece is so fantastic! There is so much depth and meaning in this piece...of when the land was taken, it not only separated the land from the Natives, but it separated the land from our communication with the animals like we had as well as drive them from their natural habitat. A deep piece that I completely enjoyed reading, well done Little Bear! *Thumbsup*

" WRITE ON ! "

Many blessings dear one, looking forward to hearing from you again, keep writing these master pieces. *Smile*

Cissy

[ New Challenge]...review one piece from all members of NAFP in 30 days....
Prizes to be given out of those who complete this task. *Bigsmile*
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Review of The Prayer  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
As I started reading this piece I was thinking....I was thinking and feeling a lot of this just this morning....my how words can touch others very soul. When I started reading...you had my attention until the very end. I realize that this isn't the kind of review that you may want, you want a more constructive review...right?

Well, I didn't see a grammar error, your writing and about the point/story that it flows out to the reader is good. I realize you used a free verse sonnet style of poetry because of the double spacing and no stanzas.

This piece reads well this way...

I read where you are praying for the Creator/God to answer your prayers and send to you love...what I am wanting to know is ....at the bottom of this piece was this the Creator talking or man?/Angel? Was a little confused on that one...maybe I just need to reread it huh?! *Wink* Just reading because your title caught my eye when I logged in.

Many Blessings to you and yours ...and don't forget to " WRITE ON ! " *Thumbsup*

Cissy
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a breath taking piece! Oh my goodness...this honestly did take my breath away. *Pthb* It is so deep but so fulfilling once you reach the end of this beautiful image that shows in words of the " talented author", the beauty of all of the Creators creations in their beauty even as a reflection upon the water. To see through your eyes at the wonder around us that was created by His hands, it is such a beautiful sight to see in your eyes. You have an eloquence in this piece that is outstanding! Thank you for allowing all of us here to read your fine works! *Thumbsup*

I almost forgot...there I go again, was gone for just a short time this time and I keep forgetting that I am reviewing your writings. I only came by to read something good...I do get lost in good writing when I am reviewing and for this I do apologize, but when I read something that catches my attention like this piece did, and pulled at me and I came into your world of this story in poetry form, which was great I might add *Delight* ...my what a enjoyable read.

*Smile* I saw no errors, for really who can honestly point out an error except for a professional, which I am not. I am merely someone who loves to read great talent, and likes to write myself on occasion. Believe me when I say though, if I had saw an error I would graciously point it out in the most kind way only to help and to NEVER discourage.
You have a very rare talent Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥmas Author Icon...many that try all their lives sometimes could never come so close to it. Never quit writing....it really does touch many of us. *Bigsmile*

Many blessings dear sister,
*Heart*
On behalf of something I was thinking up as a new activity..." Can you review one item of every member in NAFP in one month?"....You're my Guinea-pig,lol.

*Thumbsup* Write On!!! *Bigsmile*
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Review of The Bridge  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh my goodness! What an excellent poem/story of your " Bridge "! I must say it has been literally years since I have read ANYTHING this great! I had no idea Sum, that you were such an excellent writer. Now that I know, I will be coming back to read you more often. You got my interest when under the title you said a " Story-Poem "... that is how I like to write my poetry as well. If I have to say and had to choose a favorite part? It has to be the part about " Often the grass may look greener on the other side, But be content with what you have, in it take pride." This had a very good lesson taught in it for all people to read it and see it.... ' things are not always as good as they seem, or not always better, but we need to be careful of what we wish and hope for...because we may just get it and it will not be as it appeared.' But that was my own take on the meaning of this piece, what do you think? Did I come close to understanding the meaning of your wonderful " Story-Poem "? This was absolutely one of the best pieces I have really read in many years...just when I thought that I had seen the best here...then someone else comes along with a piece of writing that is Off The Chain!!! Fantastic!!! Well done there Sum, I am glad that I got the news letter from " Rising Stars Gazette from Mandy Author Icon"... Wonderful write up on you and great interview, thank you for sharing with all of us who loves to read, and thank you for sharing your beautifully written writings with all of us here at WDC.. *Thumbsup* Write On!

Many blessings dear one,
Cissy
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reviewing just because I love to read....in doing this I must say that I am reviewing on behalf of many groups that I am affiliated with. *Down* These are those such groups. Thank you again! *Bigsmile*

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In affiliation with NAFP Reviewer's Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Can't help it I am laughing myself silly here after reading your wonderful News paper article. (fiction of course, lol) This was fantastic. I thought oh no when I saw your title, but when I open up your short story article and started reading how the fax machine wanted to play one more gig on the ' Office' sitcom, it was just beyond funny! My cats sitting here looking at me like..." What??? Yep! okay...she has really lost it now folks! She is sitting there laughing like a hyena to a computer...now she is really gone now people!!!" *Laugh*
Honestly I didn't see any errors, but I would not see the grammatical errors anyway to start with ...sorry there dear...I love to read and I just get lost in the reading of the story or poem and forget all about looking for errors, and then remember and have to go back to look. Your News paper was fantastic! I loved it all and the picture was a very good and nice believable touch! Great job there Mike! I love all of this piece...tell me was this a front page story? *Laugh* Looks authentic. *Thumbsup* Write On! Well written piece, keep writing!

Just another reader...
Cissy

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Review of Sin  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I am not reviewing you for no other reason except for my own reading pleasure. I saw this title and it caught my interest. I just had to look. What I really loved about this piece is how you explained the seven deadly sins in detail in poetry form. This was excellent! Have never seen it done this way before and I love the new take on it. It makes for a much better read from my point of view when reading about the seven deadly sins instead of reading it in a book form. I Liked most of all the rhythm and rhyme that you used in this piece, fantastic! As you know, there are no flaws. So that would make this a perfect piece, correct? *Wink* Thank you for allowing all of us to read your writings, have a wonderful day there dear. Loved this!
*Thumbsup* Write On!

Cissy

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Can't be selfish. I must mention these group in my reviewing... thank you!= WaDo!
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Review of Culinary Cat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear kind Sir Karl, How are you this evening? Now I am left sitting here *Laugh**Laugh**Laugh* my self silly! What a wonderful thrill it was to read this short story in poetry form of your cat. I am still laughing here because, since you are so very good with your writing, you have painted a clear picture here for me and I could see your cat and wife there smiling as you caught on to just that right spice and right timing in which to cook that dish right that day. I still can see them in my minds eye of your wife sitting there smiling up at you as she knows well that you have got the hang of that dish by the way it smells while you are cooking, if this is fiction, then you have done a wonderful job I must say.
What did I like about this piece:
The whole thing, I saw no errors in this piece, your sentence structure was tight, very good, rhyming, rhythm
was perfect. I should say that you are a very good poet, this might just be your field, who knows right? I will be back to read more later, just wanted a take on your writings dear Sir, a review from a new WDC Friend.Cissy

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Review of A Shell  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Smile*This Andrea is a very emotional piece. I know how you feel so all alone in this disorder that you have. But please let me tell you...You are not alone! *Worry* I am not Anorexic, when I was very young, I was what they would call, but never diagnosed a border-line bulimic. *Shock* You know...purging after eating? But there are so many groups on this site that related to just about all disorders that a person could have. *Delight* I know that you will find that one if you choose to be a part of one. Because sometimes interacting with others that suffer from the same thing as you do can help a great deal, and will also feed and help you in your writing. *Bigsmile*

*Reading* Your Poem:

*Thumbsup* I like how that you are willing to talk about yourself in the form of Poetry. This has described you on a regular day of being down, which for a lot of people they never experience. You are brave for this in my opinion, because you reminded me of my first days here on Writing.com, *Frown* I was scared to death, but all I could write about it seemed was dark things from my past, and believe me, I know first hand how hard it is to put yourself out there for all to read about you in poetry form, in any form. *Worry* You must always remember, for every bad review that you may get, you will get 10 good ones in the place of it, so please, do not let any bad review STOP you from staying here,*Thumbsup**Bigsmile* and doing what comes so naturally to you as anyone can see from this poem that you have written.

*Wolf* *Smile* What stood out to me in this piece:
The way that you described yourself of being a shell of yourself of what you used to be in the way that you feel about yourself, on this particular day. [ for that I am sorry that you feel that way at any time] And the way that you see yourself. I also like the part near the end of this piece. Where you can still see the real you inside, the you that you know that you are, that inside beauty is still there, that with you saying..."she is safer, she is not a shell of me; full of life and fun, she wants to live"*Wink* YES! I love that line!!!! As you said, this is how you feel on days like this. Email me if you ever want to talk...I am a good listener, and can be a good friend too. Your writing in my opinion is very good my dear, well done! You are a natural! *Thumbsup* Write On!

*Paw*In My Opinion:

*Pawprints* I saw no errors at all, I may have gotten caught up in the reading and might have over looked something, but I really don't think so. I saw no grammatical errors, your free verse was tight and looked to be dead on correct. Your sentence structure is of what I would expect of a free verse form of Poetry. *Thumbsup* Well done!

*Starfishy* **********************Starfishy*


*Bird*Just reviewing as a reader because I like to read as well as like to write. I hope that what I have said, doesn't in no way discourage you but help. I enjoyed your writings. Keep writing. *Smile* "The WDC Angel Army" Open in new Window. This is a good group to be a part of...they help everyone, just because they are Angles of this site! They also have many great programs that help all new or old members. Give them a try, tell kiyasama that I sent you, she will know who I am...I love her to pieces, she has the biggest heart of Gold in her, except for the Owners which are the The StoryMaster Author Icon & The StoryMistress Author Icon ...they are simply the best people in the world!

A new friend, *Heart*

Cissy
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Review of To Robin Williams  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My dear Webwitch, I could not have said it better myself of our dear Robin Williams. You honestly described him very well, I especially loved the part about the moon... you remembered he was " Mork from Ork" ...of the Galaxy around the moon. I have been a fan of his since he had his first appearance on " Happy Days ". What a sense of humor that was literally " out of this world!"... the moon at one time was a big part of some of his comedy routine. In this special piece that you did for him which was so lovingly put, I can see and it takes me back to the days of Mork and Mindy, how it used to come on with the universe and the moon shining, then the egg .....it was all good memories, yet it is all so sad that he could not be helped a little sooner, before it was too late. I understand the Bipolar because of my granddaughter having it, the extreme highs and the extreme lows. He was one of the great one's who will be sorely missed. Thank you Webbie for giving to all of us a remembrance of the Late but Great Robin Williams...whom a lot of us will never forget. You painted a great picture for us all. A wonderful picture indeed until his end. Thank you.

Cissy

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Review of The Wrong Man  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Snow1* MzSnowleopard, I have to say that I loved this piece of writing! Wow, So many of us all over the world go through bad relationships at one time or another, and then there are some that never do, for those I call the very blessed ones. This is a A typical bad relationship of a man to me, and from what I remember as well...but it has been for me so long ago...I am thankful that this place, with all of their encouragement to keep writing, and Write On! I have forgotten almost that whole experience. So I owe all of that to Writing. com.

*Pumpkin*           Now, that my review for what it is, my opinion, and that is all, just my opinion, because I will tell you that I am not by any means a professional editor. I am only here to read your writings, simply because I love to read, as much as I love to write. In reading what you have written, if I may come across something that may look off, I will point it out to you so that you can reread yourself to see if you meant it to be that way, okay dear?

*Leaf1* GRAMMAR ERRORS:
I saw no visible grammar errors of any kind in this piece...if there were any, please forgive this over site.

*Leaf2g* WHAT I LIKED
I liked your intro, it captured me right away and let the reader know of the character of who to relate to in this story, it is always good, ( I found out later) to give the reader someone to focus on and give them a name as not to leave it lagging from the start. I had to learn this the hard way, which I think is my weak part of my writing as far as a story. I find it difficult sometime to add names, this you are great at and it will grab the reader (me) right from the start of the top of the page. *Thumbsup* Well done! & Keep Writing!!!

*Leaf2*CORRECTIONS:
The only correction I saw was...4th paragraph down, third line...this line to me was a tad too much indented into this line, maybe I am wrong, as I have said, I am not a good writer of Stories or short stories, but a poet instead. but to me it threw this story off a little, I was so engrossed in this story that I did not see this on my first reading of this story, I had to go back to reread this story to see if I could find anything that stuck out, and this and one other thing stuck out to me. I believe this line was meant to be a part of paragraph 4 but I could be wrong? If I was, then you needed to have skipped a space to start this new paragraph? Just my observation only okay? The next thing, and this is not an error...did you mean to double space each line here in this story? This part I was just curious about...I am like my cats, very curious, and how will I learn something that I do not know the answer to unless I ask the question to it right? *Smile* Just a readers opinion here okay dear?

*Leaf2y* OVERALL IMPRESSIONS: *Bigsmile*
I honestly really loved this whole piece, those things that I pointed out were nothing, one little tweek and it's a perfect write. This was a gripping story that you told here, you had me on the edge of my seat from the word Bill, and kept me until the word fall! Very good piece.

*Leaf4* FAVORITE PART: *Delight*

" Pride cometh before the fall." I have always like this statement.

Well done piece I thoroughly enjoyed this story, reminds me of something in my past. *Thumbsupl*
Write On!!! *Bigsmile*

" Just a review by someone who likes to read as well as write sometimes. Have a blessed week-end."

Cissy

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Review of The Garden Calls  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear, this was an amazing story. Wonderfully written, well executed, a fabulous crescendo to the final climax of the story. Let me simplify.
*Flower6* What I Like the Least? = Answer: Nothing, I liked it all!
*Star* What I liked the most: = Answer: Everything, but let me pin it down, my favorite part? This would I guess refer to the whole story ... the imagery in which you paint like an Artist paints on their canvas. You painted here a scene in which I could see it virtually before my eyes, I saw and narrated the whole scene. This is a real typical Saturday morning of home, with Mom. I loved the scene of the beautiful green grass, I could almost smell the grass and flowers in the yard and smell that sea salt air...I have smelt this before when in Panama City Beach...yes, I can smell that smell you painted here for us all. Your Mom seems like the sweet Mom that everyone wants in life right?! I love that she loves her garden so much though and takes pride in it. That is a loving woman.
ERRORS/CORRECTIONS: None! I didn't see anything that would warrant any changes to this perfect piece. Well written !

WRITE ON! *Thumbsup*
Cissy

(just a reader of good writing.)

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