That was excellent! I had a deep emotional connection with the piece and it is really thought provoking and profound. The structure and changes between first person and second person were executed perfectly. I really enjoyed it, thank you for such an inspirational piece.
That was a great story! I love the conflict you developed between the main character and Donny, and the way you built it up. It was entertaining - I was laughing really hard at the end - and right from the start you created a sense of intrigue about the protagonist. Keep writing!
That was a great story! I thought it was really entertaining, especially the ending! I loved your use of suspense and the characterisation was extremely well done. The plot was developed well and the protagonist was an interesting and deep character who is easy to engage with. Well done on a fantastic piece! :)
Well done on a creative expression of your ideas. Your use of the technique of personification was an engaging and refreshing perspective. My only criticism is in the rhyme scheme, which could have been improved, but overall it was a thought provoking and emotionally deep poem.
I love short short stories. They are often difficult to compose so congratulations on this accomplishment. Very good use of descriptive language and characterisation of your protagonist. The storyline was developed well and the ending was thought provoking. Well done :)
Thanks for this entertaining story, I enjoyed reading it!!
Your writing style is engaging and maintained my interest and attention. The suspense was thrilling, and the complications were well structured. The resolution was a fantastic end and reflected both earlier plot points and the context of our own world very accurately.
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