This poem has a fun, conversational tone with a clever bowling metaphor to explore hope, pride, and generational contrast. The rhyme and rhythm work well overall, giving it a nice flow.
Highlights:
Great imagery, especially with the "veteran players" vs. younger folks.
Lines like "laugh at the strike they stole!" are witty and vivid.
Suggestions:
The opening lines are a bit unclear—consider rewording for clarity.
The final line with "economize" feels slightly out of place; maybe swap for a word that fits the theme more closely.
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