That gave me chills!! There were so many great lines in here, like "the cold moved in the darkness"...beautiful imagery. But the best line is the last. That one sent chills up my spine. The story has a nice flow to it and is very visual. Fantastic job!
-Darlene :)
Wow! I was not expecting that! The little ghost girl broke my heart; I felt so sad for her. This is very well written and incredibly visual. You can practically smell the dust in the attic and feel her loneliness. Great job!! :)
That was fantastic! It's like you wrote of my childhood. Sad thing is I'm still afraid of the dark. The story was well written, very visual and had a great flow to it. Great job!! :)
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