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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Bon jour, Robert!
I'm getting addicted to your blogs, and this one is another reason why.
I had an inkling where this was going on, but alas, I was wrong. It deals with you trying your hand at suspensive sentences, not the actual end of the world. To be honest, I was thinking there would be huge mushroom cloud at the end instead of 'the sudden unmistakable ca-crunch of a once-human footstep'. Still, it was pretty gripping sentence, and my first notion was going to be compliment you on the length and detail you put into it, which I still am.
Well done, Amigo! I can see why that song inspired you, and thanks for letting me know some of the words to it! *Bigsmile*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Robert, and have a magnificent day!
PS-Speaking of the end of the world, I see that your WdC 'anniversary' is 9/11. *Shock2* Sadly, that was the end of the world in a sense, and for a lot of people. *Sad*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there, FireWriter!
I'm no expert on poetry (mainly because I don't understand them most of the time!), but I thought this was good for one of your first pieces on here. I know it's a little short, and it has a sort of Yogi Bear flavor to it ('not your average bear'), but I like the happy feeling you gave to it with his 'going against the grain' attitude and enjoying being out in the snow instead of opting for greener pastures like other bears.
Methinks he might be a bear of the Polar variety! *Laugh*
A 'parable poem', eh? Makes sense! Thanks for teaching me that! *Thumbsupl*
Kee ponw ritin gon, FW, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Odessa!
This is a cool little story for a 400 word flash fiction piece.
A planet inhabited only by plant life? *Thumbsupl* Reminds me of an old Star Trek episode.
You did a nice job with the opening by immediately giving us the setting, and the descriptions were great. I can picture that strange jungle surrounded by colorful and weird vegetation perfectly, and then seeing the poor dude struggling to free himself from his thorny situation.
I’m not sure what hard-core environmentalists would say about this *Laugh*, but you did what you had to do!
‘every slight movement carving another notch in his skin’ (nice!)
Well done, Odessa!
Kee ponw ritin gon, I hope to see you in the contest more often, and have a fantastic day!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Trailerpark!
This is pretty good, and I can see why it won the contest. Congratulations!
I like the way you told this, and having the good doctor Sabian arrested for doing exactly what he claimed was mere speculation by those well known psychiatrists was about as ironic as it gets. But to then have Emily decide take his place?
Now I'm a little confused? Are her intentions well meant? Or does she have other plans? Seems to me there's two way she can go...
Great spelling and grammar (you really did sound like a psychiatrist!), but I did see one niggle:
"What do you think the dreams mean, Emily?" He asked dismissively. (he--speech tag niggle-there's a few other in this--I'll leave you a link to a short article on speech tags if you want to check it out)
Otherwise, great job!

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Kee ponw ritin gon, Trailerpark Bodhisattva! Thanks for sharing this, and have a great day/evening/tomorrow!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Prosperous Snow!
You probably know I love Halloween and anything about Halloween, so it was a real treat to find this on a Random Read & Review!
It's a little simple, but that's what I like about it. It's short and to the point, and even though I'm no expert on poetry, the stanzas seemed to rhyme good enough for me.
What's more is that he's not just any scary pumpkin. This guy's on a mission to find 'humans wearing disguises' and 'consuming their brains' to 'avenge the Jack o' Lantern's pains'.
Excellent! *Smirk2*
Kee ponw ritin gon, Prosperous Snow! Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful evening and a fantastic new decade!
PS-I just noticed you joined WdC on Halloween, 2002! RIGHT ON!!!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello there, Dagtar.
This isn't bad for one of your first pieces on here. It's certainly different, anyway.
I like the idea of The Woman in the Machine being a controlled object who's sadly stuck in a continuous loop, even it IS her favorite memory, but who would want to relive that over and over and over? To me, that would be just as terrible as having to relive my WORST memory over and over.
One thing about this was it was little hard to follow. And you did a lot more telling than showing, too. Please don't think I'm criticizing this! I like the concept, but it was just the way it was told that needs a little help. And just like everyone else on this site, we're all here to help each other become better writers!
I did like how you brought the story full circle (I think) by having Lithia and a new(?) Woman in the Machine start the loop all over again at the end of the story! There's some serious irony in that, as well as some nice thinking outside of the box!
Overall, good job.
Here's that link to Telling vs. Showing if you're interested: ""Telling" Vs. "Showing" - Part 1" Open in new Window.
Kee ponw ritin gon, Dagtar! Thanks for entering the contest, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Howdy, Rinsoxy!
This is great! I love the idea of your offspring making clones of you to help you, but eight? Seriously? And then to find out they were hybrid human and canine clones?
This has a serious flavor of George Langelaan's The fly (originally published in the June issue of Playboy magazine in 1957, believe it or not!).
I also enjoyed how you brought it full circle by revising your mistake comment! Yeah, gotta keep those security codes secret! *Laugh*
Great job, my friend! Flawless spelling and grammar, and nice us of the prompt phrase.
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for the chuckles, and have a fantastic evening/tomorrow!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Robert!
This is an interesting question, and I'm glad you asked it.
Oddly enough, I don't and never have used any family of friend's names in my stories, nor have I have used past personal experiences or any of my friends' (at least that I consciously know of, anyway). Maybe it's a superstition I made up in my own head, but I think it would put bad mojo on them if I used a name of my family or a friend, especially since I usually write horror.
Have I ever used an enemy's name in one of my stories? I'll plead the 5th to that...*Smirk2*
I do agree though that using a 'souvenir' of our past would be helpful in certain situations.
Another great blog post, Robert!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a great day!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello there, Drake!
This is a nice feel good story with a happy ending, and it's serves as sort of a moral for people who have learning problems as well the elderly folks.
You did a good job of showing Quincy's desperation as he took this 'test of his life', and the spelling and grammar was good too, sans a few speech tag niggles.
HOWEVER, you didn't use the prompt phrase, 'Where am I?' in this!
“I really need to pass this test(.)” Quincy thought to himself...' (speech tag niggle-should be a comma-there's a few other spot in here that should also be commas-I'll leave a link to speech tags if you want to check out a brief article on them)

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Con!
I thought this was a pretty nice and well written story about your childhood and growing up on a farm in Saskatchewan, Canada. It's a little short, but I like your sense of humor and attitude! It's also a little nostalgic, and I can see that it in your writing.
Your mother was an intelligible and wise one, having used those white feathers to keep Norma off those cellar stairs and other dangerous places.
I really enjoyed this, Con! I'm probably going to read and review some of your other pieces soon!
By the way, I looked at your picture, and you look amazing for 93 years! *Shock*
Oh, and by the way again *Laugh*, my late father was born in Rabbit Lake, Saskatchewan on June 13th, 1922!
Keep on writing on, my friend, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write (and judging from your port intro you do!), then you're going to love it here!
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Review of Why in the World?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good day, Joto-Kai!
I'm not as religious as I once was (I was/am a baptized and confirmed Christian), but I still do 'believe', so I thought this was a pretty good piece not only on our own existence, but His as well and why he created the cosmos.
The idea of you simply meeting Him in a booth in a garden restaurant and buying you some cantaloupe might sound a bit odd, but He has appeared in a lot of stranger places (Yes, I know this was a dream!). There's a lot of different theories rolling around about why He does what he does and did what He did, and allowing the people to enjoy his other creations is indeed a good enough reason as any.
I think it would be pretty darn boring creating all those cosmos and then not having anything to watch or do with them! It would be like buying a little girl a doll house with out any dolls!
Well done, Joto-Kai!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a super great day/evening/tomorrow!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello there, Charr, and happy belated 6th 'birthday' on here!
This isn't bad for short horror piece. I like how you described this man/creature/demon as he lured you out of the car and over the railing (under the false pretense that he'd been hit), only to wind up 'eating' you. And having his jaw unhinge made it a little more believable.
The ending was a bit ambiguous though, since we really don't know if you were hallucinating or not? Most likely it WAS the drugs, since you survived!
Still, that'd be one heckuva nightmare to have to relive!
Excellent spelling and telling!
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing this, and may you have many more wonderful 'birthdays' on WdC!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Robert!
It's always fun to peek in on these blog posts, and this one was no different. You and I have something in common when it comes to imbibing, and I share some of the things you mention in these posts.
A perfect example is: 'In the battle between "should" and "want," "want" wins every time.' That seems to be my credo as well, for better or worse.
I also want to thank you for that linguistic lesson about Yiddish in regard to the word 'noodge'. I'm not Yiddish, but I'm going to try to start using it now! *Bigsmile*
Kee ponw ritin gon, my friend! Thanks for sharing these articles, and have a wonderful day!

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Hello there, Greg M!
Saw this in The "Short Stories Newsletter (January 15, 2020)" Open in new Window. and had to check it out!
This is really good, and I can see why it won the Daily FF Contest. Congratulations!
I wasn't sure where this was going at first. Who was this Neville character? A baby brother perhaps? And why exactly is your mother angry at you?
I'm a big fan of surprise/twisted endings (as is Arakun the twisted raccoon, and you really delivered with this!
Poor Neville. I'm sure you will miss him. *Laugh*
Great job, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, thanks for sharing this, and have a great day/evening/week!
PS-I'm returning those GPs to you. It was reward enough just to read this!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there, Rinsoxy!
This is pretty good. I'm not too sure about calling the soup kitchen patrons 'worthless bums', though (which is obviously why they started chucking their food at you). Sadly, I was in their shoes at one time, and some folks are just down on their luck.
BUT...I do see the humor in the food fight! I like the imagery you gave to this with your descriptions of the patrons throwing the different types of food all around, as well as at you. Pea soup, mushy bread, cream of mushroom. I don't know if you had a word limit on this, but if not I'd encourage you to expand on this! I know it's just flash fiction, but I can see a few more humorous things happening here!
Great spelling and telling, but I did spot one tiny speech tag niggle:
"Who started this?" The upright cop asked. (The shouldn't be capitalized. If you're interested, I'll leave a short article about speech tags below)
Otherwise, nice job!

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Kee ponw ritin gon, Rinsoxy! Thanks for sharing this, and have a marvelous evening and a fiendishly fabulous new year and decade!

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Bon jour, ♥HOOves♥!
As far as weather is concerned, I’ve been lucky to live in Texas for the last few years (if you consider living in TX lucky), but having spent most of my life living in N. California and Alaska, I know all too well what slipping on ice and thundersnow is all about!
You did a nice job of showing us one of those ‘stay in bed days’, and I also believe that dogs and cows and probably most animals know better than humans not to venture outside whilst the weather is miserable, lest it make us miserable! *Laugh*
Well done, my bovine friend! Congratulations on the Cramp co-victory!
Kee ponw ritin gon, have a wonderful day, and may your barn always be comfortable and warm!

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G’day, Robert!
Oh, to be young again!
This is pretty good, and it brought back a lot good and not-so-good memories. More of the former, though, I’m happy to say.
I enjoyed the way you told this. Some might think you’re bragging, but I see as it being honest. Most young men are young and stupid (as opposed to being old and stupid *Laugh*) when it comes to the allure of beautiful women. We can’t help it, it’s just Nature. We’re built that way.
I’m sure you had some 2nd thoughts about going out shooting with that husband (Gulp! Another *Laugh*), but you faced your fears, and that says a lot. At least you knew had some knowledge of guns beforehand, though, so I’m sure that helped a bit, even though they were old Revolutionary style muzzle loaders.
Besides, turned out you were the better shot!
I’m 54 now, but as I said, I’ve still got some good memories to hold onto.
When I was barely 18, my girlfriend’s father found out she was pregnant, thanks to my girlfriend’s cousin who was supposed to be sworn to secrecy (yeah, right! *Angry*) . I was told I was supposed to call him, and reluctantly, VERY reluctantly, I did. He asked me what he should do about it, and I said ‘probably shoot me.’ He chuckled a little, and then said, ‘No, that would be too easy.’
I ended up marrying her, but ironically she was ALSO a flame-headed vixen! I’m a sucker for redheads, even though I know they’re the most evil creatures to ever walk the earth!
Thanks for sharing this, Robert! And *Music1* thanks for the memories! *Music2*
Kee ponw ritin gon, and have a fantastic day!

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Greetings, Rinsoxy!
This is pretty good for a flash fiction piece, and that ending was indeed twisted. Granted there was more telling than showing, but since this was written in the first person, that's to be expected. To be honest, at first I was thinking this was going to be based on a true story, at least until I got to the gun part.
I like the 'superpower' reference, but I'm not quite sure why you killed Mattie. Jealousy, perhaps? That would be the motive I would suspect.
I also enjoyed how laid back you were after you did the deed. Oh, yes. The job is done and now you can relax...*Sleepy*
Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot one tiny niggle:
'Rudy’s mouth flopped open and closed silently(.) it was almost like he was a goldfish.' (should be two sentences)
Otherwise, well done, my fiend friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, good luck in the contest, and have a wonderfully wicked day!

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Greetings, Latenlove!
For your 1st piece on here, this is pretty good. Granted it's a bit sad (I read your port intro and saw that you tend to write about depressing and sad things), but I like the way you wrote this. I don't know much about poetry, mainly because I don't understand it most of the time, but I can see what you're talking about here.
I can relate to you're being 'enslaved by mind' comment, as well as the one about words not coming easy for you. But if they don't, you shouldn't think of it as 'torment'. Writer's Block is a very real illness, killing thousands of writers each day (*Laugh* I'm kidding, of course). Seriously though, WB is something we all have as writers, some more than others. But having been writing for so long, I've noticed that the more you try to force the words on the page, the harder it becomes. Yes, sometimes they do flow from the mind, but not often. We need inspiration and a clear mind to bring our stories to life!
Don't let those words get muddled, and don't think you're trapped behind walls. Take you time, and just start out slowly.
Here's something that works for me sometimes if you're really suffering. Try writing a story backwards. In other words, start with the ending and then work from the beginning to get to it.
And as for this particular piece, I think you wrote it perfectly. You said exactly what you felt, and it was easy to understand! And I love the similes and metaphors you used! That alone is a sign of good writing!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Latenlove, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello there, Kevin Green!
This is a really sincere, honest, and open autobiography (one of the best I've seen!), and I commend you on writing it! Not a lot of people would open themselves up so much like this, and that's what I like about it. Not to mention that I can relate to it in some ways!
I can't say I was ever bullied or had some of the 'problems' you had, but I live a life that's similar to yours now. I don't drive anymore, and my romantic life is kaput at the moment. I'm currently living in Texas, 1,500 miles away from my daughters and grandchildren and the few friends I have back there, but here I have no friends! I spend all day here at the library with my virtual friends on WdC, and believe it or not, I'm closer to them than some of my actual friends back in California !
But enough about me, dangit! This is about you!
First off, please don't give up on finding a romantic relationship! I haven't, even though I'm not really trying much lately. Will I ever have one? Don't know. Truth be told, I get along fine with myself-it's the rest of the world I have problems with! *Laugh* But if it happens, so be it.
Here's something else: You're only 3 months and 9 days older than I am! I might not have gone what you've gone through, but age-wise, we're pretty much the same when it comes to wisdom. My point being is don't let life get you down! At the very least you're being self-supporting, which is something I'm not even doing right now. I haven't had a job in a long time, but I'm still smiling, even though I wake up some days wondering why!
It's never too late to change your life around (we're both going to turn 55 in a few months! *Shock2*), but I have plans for the future. Whether they come to fruition or not remains to be seen, but I'm going to sit on my a** and waste what little of my life away!
One last thing: you're a very good writer! I've done more than 12,700 review on here, and rarely do I come across a piece that doesn't have any spelling and/or grammatical errors! And you don't beat around the bush; you say exactly what's on your mind, and I envy you for that! That and your honesty!
Thanks for sharing this, Kevin! I truly mean that! And I'm glad you joined WdC! I'm not a big poetry fan, but I'll check out "About Me" Open in new Window. as I have a chance!
Kee ponw ritin gon (that's my way of saying 'keep on writing on'), and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Sue!
Dang. This is certainly a dramatic piece, as well as a sad one. I hope (and I'm pretty sure) this isn't from personal experience, but writing in the first person almost makes it feel that way.
You did a great job of telling us about her 'problems' which seemed to grow exponentially as time went on, but to have her father say that to the daughter after she'd cleaned up her act was awful! It's like he shattered everything she'd worked so hard for up to that point!
One tiny niggle:
'Apparently she "didn’t need to study(,)” to achieve... (don't need that comma)
Otherwise, good job!
Kee ponw ritin gon, good luck in the contest, and have a fantastic day!

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Greetings, Dave!
What a nice parody of the loveable Christmas classic song, Rudolph the red-nosed reindeer! *Smirk2* And a very creative one, at that!
The idea of Frosty being a hit man (or snowman) was great, and I like how you used it for that prompt! With him wearing that top hat (like the old rich gangsters used to wear nice hats and/or clothing), it makes it more realistic.
The spelling and grammar was flawless, and the rhyming was good too. A couple of those stanzas seemed a bit bumpy though, but that's just the opinion of somebody who doesn't know anything about poetry.
Well done, my friend!
Kee ponw ritin gon, good luck in the contest, and have a magnificent day!

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Hi, Jube Cube!
I'm glad you like it, but it shouldn't be totally unexpected. Remember I asked you if your address was up to date here on WdC a while back?
Also, you know you would haven't got this if it weren't for you giving me the GPs and wanting to get this MB commissioned in the first place! Which is why I sent you the very first one when it finally came to fruition! (The StoryMistress had somehow overlooked it, and it was only when another member asked about their own MB that had also been overlooked did she see the 'SCREAMS!!!' one!)
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Hi there, Ponylover!
For your 1st piece on here, this isn't bad. It's pretty short, but not short enough that we don't know what's going on. Siblings, especially if they're spread out in age, do indeed have contempt for one another, and you did an nice job showing that here. You didn't say how old each one is, but I'm guessing that they're ALL a bit childish to a degree!
Great spelling and grammar, and nice use of the question prompt!
Kee ponw ritin gon, Ponylover, and welcome to WdC! If you like to write, then you're going to love it here!
PS-You might want to get your bioblock (biography) set up so we can know a little something about you (hobbies, favorite books/authors, location, etc.), but that's up to you, of course.
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PSSS- I noticed you don’t have any Merit Badges yet. Click on My Account (on the left hand side) > Achievements, and then go back and check your email. You should have a few surprises waiting for you there! *Bigsmile* You only need to do this when you’ve reached certain ‘achievements’.

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Ahoy, Xiea!
Hmm. I don't know what to say about this, other than it goes against most conventional thought, which is completely opposite from what you have here. Everybody is told to stand up and face their fears, NOT to run away, NOT to cower in the face of adversity, but could they be wrong? Who knows? Perhaps you're onto something here.
But I don't think so. I have a strong suspicion you wrote this tongue in cheek, and if so, well done! Why be normal, eh? Instead of going with the flow, go against it, at least in regards to what all those other 'self-help' advocates say! *Laugh*
Great spelling and grammar, but I did spot a couple of small niggles:
'and you're drowning in you feelings' (your)
'and running away from what you what suppose to accomplish so long ago?' (awkward sentence)
Kee ponw ritin gon, Xiea! Thanks for sharing this, and have a magnificent day!

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