I love the poems that you write. This one in particular is one I'm working on myself in what I say and do. I think it's important to keep a promise so there's no disappoint on either end. Keep writing!
I love your poem! the only thing I would say in spelling is the word "death" should be spelled "deaf", but other than that I love the positivity in this poem! Keep writing!
It's good that you're writing on a topic that discusses suicide, but I would not make them feel bad when they start to push you away. It's part of a cycle that goes with thoughts of suicide that cannot always be helped. There are times when the person that's at the brink of suicide start to think negatively and might start to push people away, but that's when they need to be reassured by telling them "Well, if you ever need me, I'm here." Not throwing in their face that you were there. It could cause them to go into deeper depression and the chances of them commiting suicide goes higher. I don't want to discourage you from writing, but I hope my review will change how you approach it. Keep writing!
I liked your story about a spinning top. Not that scary though, but that's to say that if I ever woke up to one of them spinning out of nowhere, it would probably scare me a little bit. Your vocabulary is better than mine. I'm still a newbie and have to work on my craft more. Good story though. I hope the points make up for what I lack in the review. Keep writing!
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