This was a beautifully written story. Easy to read and enjoyed the characters. It was also a good life lesson in faith and was told in such a way,that makes it easier to visualize.
I'm glad you shared it 😊. I didn't find any typos or misspelled words. It was broken up well and kept it's continuity.
Very good writing!
Write ✍️ on!
Intuey I would have given you 10 stars 🤩 at least if possible! Your Blog is the best I've ever read because of it's soulfulness and your a heck of a writer ( and person!) you've been through so much and are able to bring us into your experiences.
You covered many topics, including family , parenting, history, grief,joy prayers and miracles.
I saved your blog to my desktop to return to the beginning and get the rest of the stories 😉.
We met here 20 odd years ago and I'm thankful for your help and friendship always.
This is the first review I've given for a blog and lady you definitely deserve being read!
Blessings 🪻☯️ to you and your family. Your a good soul and an example of an amazing woman ♀️.
I love this version of him! 😍 We used to have an awesome statue in metal in our living room ( until a storm and tree changed that.)
You did a very good introduction about Ganesha.
Some folks don't know or understand about him or other deity's. Unless they are taught about the different cultures and beliefs.
Thanks for sharing this awesome picture 👏.
Very nicely written! ( I know those tunnels.) You give a good description and feel for your experience, to share this moment with others. It has a good rhythm and I don't see any typos. I did see your spelling of " tires" and found it interesting. Write ✍️ on indeed!
This was very well-written and an intense " slice of life" piece with extremely relatable characters.
( I found it on a random read) Very glad I did because it was worth reading! It had a good plot but for me the best was your character's and the dialogue. It was easy to follow and talked from a real life stance. It was honest.
I wanted to give you 5 Stars but it needs the paragraphs broken and spaced from " She sat down and sighed, to and blotting the corner of her left eye"
Because it was hard to read and if you change it, please let me know. I will give you 5 Stars!
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I found "My Favorite Toy" an interesting read! It had an different type of flow ( I didn't realize until the end there was a abcb,7-6-7-6 syllabic format. I'm aware of the format for Haiku 5-7-5.)
The short descriptions were ample to get the point across and make an enjoyable point, about the games you spoke of! It had nice humor blended.
No typos or anything I could suggest to improve it!
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Did you hear that? Was a fun item to read! I think the prompt was used well yet I wish the word count was a bit longer, because the plot was interesting. It was written well and I was drawn into it wanting to know more about what was making the noise and what was happening! It ended with a cliffhanger and was very entertaining! No typos or things I can suggest to improve it.
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A beautiful display of the inner workings of the Haiku. I didn't realize how much backstory there was to the creation of them. I enjoyed the comparison of traditional Haiku in Japanese vs our English version. It helped me to perceive my own outlook on writing more, through what you have written in Wings. How you approached writing it. The explanation of your experience in interactions with others in a group setting were an eye opener indeed! From time to time I've thought to go back to writing them again and have been inspired to pick up the pen again! I appreciate your help in making corrections in mine.
I didn't see any errors or typos.
A quite beautiful poem.The descriptions pull me into this place of peace and reality.you set a very good tone for this poem. It evokes emotions very well!
I see no typos or contradictions. It was well-paced bringing just the right amount of words and imaging.
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Well 👍 done!
Very well written Zeke!
I enjoyed your food for thought on seeing the other ways hidden in life. To challenge others to appreciate life's mystery and search for answers.
I didn't find any typos through my reading it.
Please write ✍️ on!
You do it very well.
This was a highly entertaining poem with a great sense of humor 😄! It also set the record straight on how you got your WDC name and kept it across the board 🛹 makes sense!
I didn't find any typos or something to be corrected either.
I'm also curious 🐒( like George) as to where Andre is these days?
Enquiring minds want to know!
Write ✍️ on Indeed.
Aww, thanks for sharing this one 😊!
It brings back memories of kids and grandkids!
I like the style of your writing in this to show emphasis 🥁!
I didn't see any typos or anything to correct.
It was a sweet piece to take a word picture of the moment's and provide nice 🎵 memories!
Loved it 😄! You did a great job with the clues!
I got em all right, so yes I do remember ❤️📺 and so glad 😁 you do too!
I gave you five stars for your creative idea and the work you put into it.
I couldn't find any typos or errors in it either!
I hope folks join in and share their scores .
I'll post in comments!
You show deep meaning in your words using simplicity.
In an old grammar book by Stark and White, it says " omit needless words!"
You did this well and made your points 😁.
I didn't find any typos either!
Welcome to WDC and write on.
I found this an interesting post 😁! Your descriptions of China and life there were very informative and enjoyable to read! It would help if you used more spacing between paragraphs to make it easier to read. Besides that, it was a good read, and hope you will be writing more on your experiences!
A lovely piece for the class assignment! You did a very expressive job of showing ( not telling) about Joey's embarrassment and other emotions. The storyline was interesting and engaging. The environment and the residents are spot-on. ( As one who has been a Nurse assistant and volunteer.)
It was an enjoyable read with a charming ending!
Write ✍️ on indeed 😁!
Bless all involved for making this a beautiful remembrance space and allowing people who would never benefit from reading these special authors a chance to experience the words they chose to ✍️. Because it exists they can still live on to inspire others like myself.
(I pray when my time comes, to be remembered in this way)
Thanks to all who maintain this sacred space. I will make it a favorite to visit and understand these folks. Bright Blessing's to all and God G-d bless you.
🕯️🌹💐🦋🌻🕯️💗🎶
Wow I started at the end and will have to start at one, besides that am glad this entry was the one I started with! You wrote with a lot of passion for writing and besides the only 4 misspelled words ( you did give us a heads-up about letting the writing flow and editing later! In Steven King's book " On Writing" When you write, write
When you edit, edit. True words 😉!)
You put so much energy into this teaching piece. There's good pointers on the process of writing and also your day to day descriptions of how to handle distractions, which as you truthfully put can't always be ignored. Looking forward to reading more of this!
Thanks for representing us disABILITY writers and bringing Awareness!
Write ✍️ on indeed!!!
I admire your courage in sharing what you went through. I'm praying 🙏 as am writing this will have a blessed ending.
You have a very unique style of writing with is so real and down to earth. Will keep reading as it so matters to know you are ok, after all you've been through. And how you didn't back down!!! Happy Ground hogs day ( which led me here!)
I loved reading this! Adorable yet good thought provoking... I'm going to share it with others. You hit the nail right on the head!
The truth he tells is so simple and how many ever get it?
It was told well and far as I can see,no misspelled words.
Will be checking out your other works. Write ✍️ on indeed!
This is an awesome and beautiful well written slice of true life. Your descriptions are spot on! ( as a former C.N.A who also worked with many types of client's as these and the elderly, Indeed we do it for love.) I hope those who will find comfort in reading this and those who would benefit by learning from it will take the time to. There are so many misconceptions about mental illness. It has always been my prayer that people would do more research to see that not all are harmful. Many are good kind people trying to escape the prison of their personal labyrinth and live a normal life. Thanks for writing this and letting me share it! Oh no typo issues!
Sage needed a capital but I really enjoyed reading this and the imagery.
I would have liked a second stanza to continue your short "adventure".
Standing alone as it is, it works. Showing the contrast of " the barren trees" against the serenity of sage.
This was a very moving piece and using the viewpoint of the deer fits perfectly.(As one who lived many years in Oregon and saw the changes there to nature...)
Your imagery is spot on and even one who has never been so close to nature can understand this story. And I would hope feel it in their heart, as I have. Write on you have a blessed beautiful gift! Thanks for writing this.
I sometimes wondered why you chose the name "Dogpack". After reading this inspired article about the why's and the sharing of your experience and writers soul I feel blessed to know you, even more! It's written from your heart and soul. You have an important mission and hoping more people will learn from you ❤️🕯️. And become more inspired as I have today 😊! Bless you always.
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