This poem depicts some intense emotions of depression , but then again the ending denotes light ., hope , a heart that can sing a melody and seeing a definite recovery in the future . Writing is a good outlet for expressive thoughts so write on .
May the force of hope and creativity continue to dwell in you ,,God Bless
it could have been best , if I had read this to my hubby a vet ,,,but I bid him adieu last March not because of the hero's battle but due to illness ...I treasure the flag they creatively folded and gave to me the sound of taps still echos in my mind and the love he had given me for 35 yrs is so greatly appreciated esp. this thanksgiving ...so I join you in giving honor to our soldiers who fought for those they'll never knew ..
the title is fitting , the imagery depicts our respect and admiration for all our heroes who gave it all for our America's freedom .. I really love reading it ,, it's excellent .. thank's for sharing ,,,,,
Wow ! this poem is about intense emotions of hopelessness, darkness,demons,and giving up the gift of life ,,, only then one can experience freedom of life or death ...The tone is sad &depressing , diction is good the flow is fair , the imagery is vivid .I hope this is totaly fiction . Keep writing !
when you get the chance pls. read my poem " Rendezvous with me " and tell me what you think
I really enjoyed reading this . The imagery is vivid about girls who sometimes wish they could be like someone else , but in reality you are unique in your owm special way , writing poetry is a talent , so focus or accentuate on your assets , and smile cuz they'll smile back at you .Girls for me is a blessing as I'm one .Diction and flow is good , intense emotions of disatisfaction and inferiority are ovious but otherwise it's comprehensible , Keep writing !
When you get the chance pls. read my poem "Yours and Mine " and tell me what you think ,
I loved reading this poem ,it gives life it's meaning ,The context is about the past ,nothing much you can do ,they become pointless regrets, yet you can learn lessons from them, the future will remain a mystery but decisions made can sometimes shape the future , more importantly be thankful for today ,the gift of life is bestowed upon you as the present ,,It's well written ,,,keep writing .
when you get the chance pls read my poem " yours and mine " and tell me what you think,
this is a verry well written eulogy , painting a portrait with words that most describe Harmony,The context is mostly about her life , her character who had touched so many people's lives as she was a likeable person,had a good sense of humor ,always maintained her cool ,believed in helping others and live a good christian life.It's hard to comprehend that life can be taken at a tender age of 21 when some of us are just starting to know life at that age and looking forward to the future. Let it be a consolation for you , death is just merely a suspended sleep , there'll be resurrection when Jesus comes again ,then you'll see your loved ones and for those who kept the faith , eternal life will be their gift ,.Jesus died in the cross for our sins so we can have eternal life in heaven (this is only my belief,,so don't take this personally ) I feel like knowing her as you have good literay skill, Time heal all wounds ,meantime keep writing,
Whenever you get time pls.read my poem "Rendezvous With Me " and tell me what you think ,
wow! how wonderful love can be ,as whispered in thine ear only to reckon her dying moments .you never fear to be alone ,with faith in your heart you knew that your love for each other will be eternally and the hope that she'll be in heaven waiting for thee .I love reading this poem as it is beyond romance and I'm definitely a romantic .The tone is sad , the imagery is about endearing yet priceless memories, the rhyme and rhythm is superb, need I say more why I gave it a 5?
we need more poets like you ,so keep writing . Now whenever you get the chance pls read my poem " Rendezvous with me " and tell me what you think .
wow!short but intense ,the imagery is rather vivid but baffling .It's about a relationship that's not suppose to be ,a mere commitment on her part but for the other an obsession.The ending implied a description of a twisted mind that ended up morbidly.I love short stories like this so keep on writing .
If you like romance pls.read my poem " Rendezvous with me " and tell me what you think.
May the force of Dark Vader be with you ,
Dollzell
when I was young ,my terrible shyness led me to boyfriendless ,,, so I ended up writing love letters to my "best friend's boyfriends ". pretending I was them cuz they just don't know how to write.They always seem to like the way I write .I agree with everything you say ,,,thanks for sharing .
when you get the chance please read my poem " Rendezvous with me " and tell me what you think .
May the force of happy writing be with you always ,
wow!your poem had engulfed my adoration of your poetic skills , the imagery is nature as it's core, the unique picture of the tree is indeed something to cherish , the tone is more of awe and wonder, the emotional impact is the realization that God's creation is embraced in our hearts, perfect rhyming,good diction and flow is gentle and smoothe ,overall the best ...Love reading it , keep writing my friend .
When you get the chance pls review my poem" Rendezvous with Me " and tell me what you thonk ,
I'm a romantic and this poem had resonated in my life .The imagery shows a lot of emotions about change and hope .The tone is mellow ,the flow is good . My favorite line " Because of the chance I never took " Like you I was very shy and to this day regrets it .So my dear, be brave and say those perfect words , you have nothing to loose, but everything to gain ,,your love. Love this poem ,,,Keep writing .
Whenever you get the chance pls. read my poem " Rendezvous with me " and tell me what you think,
smiles ,
Dollzell
wow!what exuberant words, the imagery is sophisticated and complex for my comprehension ,the tone is emotionally fitting , the story lingered but I love the little twist in the end. Phew! it's just his sister ,and the climax triggered your smile.I enjoyed reading this .Keep writing .!
When you have time maybe you can review my poem too ." Rendezvous with me "
Keep smiling ,
Dollzell
this is a poem about a loss of a love one ,the imagery is about a portrait of your love for your dad.The tone is sad but resigned and a hope of being together someday is wonderful.For some this might not even the case .The diction is good and I like the way you write ..so keep writing.
When you get the chance pls.read my poem " Yours and Mine " and tell me what you think
wow!what an inspiring words of wisdom , and I totally agree .I believe these are the signs of the times that the 2nd coming is near and my prayers is that we will rise on the ist resurrection ,not the 2nd.I'm worried about my grands that even schools are not a safe place anymore but if the belief in God is instill in their hearts then they will fear not but have faith as it is thru His light and grace and our faith that God is faithful if we ask for forgiveness for our sins .Temptations is not sin but action to evil desire is ,and resisting this is what builds character .I do wish I could write like you , intellectually that is..
When you get the chance pls .read my poem " Life is what we make it " and tell me what you think
War is inevitable and the courage to serve is admirable .The title is fitting , the imagery is about ambivalent emotions, he's had to leave his family to prove his courage,he'll miss the affection and love of his wife but in his heart he believes in victory,He is detremined to survive and return home regardless of sand ,camel and lost war.The tone is mellow, diction and flow is good ,I enjoy reading it ,,write on!
When you get the chance please read my poem " Rendevous with me " and tell me what you think,
you're right , they become your inspiration in writing ,being the object of your affection , it's easy to write about them. Just go easy , don't let these thoughts consume you ,, enjoy friendship ,maintain your self worth .I just put these saying in my facebook "when somebody loves you, you realize your self worth , but when you loose that love you think you're worthless , think again ,, sombody will come along and find "you " special " Write on !
when you get the chance please read my essay " Something called love " and tell me what you think.
Dollzell
Like war technology is inevitable.God gave men knowledge to use technology . The world will get smaller and the gospel of His 2nd coming will be spread all over the world. It started with a religious war , it will probably end that way too , That is if you believe in the Bible as manifested in the book of revelation .I agree men were born free , free to choose . So whatever we do , It is a matter of choice. We are also given a gift or talent and the knowledge to use it wisely. we are not robots. Globalization is sometimes a disadvantage . Jobs were taken out to other countries for cheap labor. Movies, TV's , internet technology , can affect us and can alter our culture and traditions if we let them . As parents it is our fundamental task to counsel our children and direct them to be a good child, adult , parent or grandparent . Life is a cycle . Life is God's gift to us . Great writing , Keep on !
when you get the chance pls , read my poem " Life is what you make it " and tell me what you think.
This poem had touched my heart. The title is fitting.This poem is written by your heart and mind that also painted a beautiful portrait of your mother who had a heart of gold.and had given you unconditional love .The imagery is filled with emotions of love , despair , regrets ( not much time with her ) loneliness, joy and hope . Remember death is just a suspended sleep .There'll be resurrection on Jesus 2nd coming and you will see each other again . If you keep the faith there is always hope .The tone ,diction and flow is well written .Keep on writing .
Anything philosophical always interest me .The title is fitting , The imagery is vivid , explicit ,emotional , and expressive of your very own perception of life . You don't have to agree with me ,,but I believe before creation there is already a plan for salvation.In this world. there is only man and woman and the battle between good and evil .Although we can't choose our parents , our life's journey is dependent on how we choose our destination. Since historical time God always placed country's leaders ,as war is inevitable.Now we 're back to religious wars gradually demoralizing our country. Due to the economic chaos ,people tend to turn to religion for comfort Unfortunately some worship another human who hasn't even resurrected himself.The life , death and ressurrection of Jesus is one powerful truth that shows us the light .Wisdom of the world is sometimes just foolishness .His 2nd coming can prove that His victory over evil will end life's unfairness . Eternal life is the prize .
Thank you for sharing this and continued success on your writing.
when you get the chance please read my poem " Life is what we make it " and tell me what you think .
I agree silence is not the language of love and can be misunderstood .The title is fitting.The imagery is about unilateral affection ,deceit , hopelessness , broken dreams ,and a sad ending .The tone is good and flows well .Overall is a good read , Keep on writing !
When you get the chance pls read my poem " Footprints in my heart " and tell me what you think.
I think you should have gotten an A for this ,,I had read your bio and if it's non -fiction, I must admire your courage to hold on to HOPE until you had achieve where you are now.
The imagery about "Lynn " is vivid and explicit .There's a lot of intense emotions , like abuse , despair , loneliness, depression, hopelessness and even the thought of ending it all.But there's also realism to all of these things .Good job...Write on !
When you get the chance pls .read my poem " Life is what you make it" and tell me what you think,
This poem is about a complete ,wholehearted adoration of someone your heart desire , the emotions you feel , and the future you see. I love reading it , Keep writing !
When you get the chance please read my poem " Yours and mine " and tell me what you think.
Oh how tragic ,but still sublime ..The title fits the imagery well,such magnificent use of words , lots of intense emotions ,metaphor and the tragic end .My favorite line " Love is stronger than death " It denotes wholehearted love , faithfullness and commitment.Great writing !!
I wish I could be like Sasha , I never had the guts to confront him , but of course he never said goodbye ...he just vanish into thin air ,,and I just knew ,so I move on.
When you get the chance please read my essay " Something called Love " and tell me what you think .
Good luck ...in love ....as well as in your writing endeavors .you're a great writer .
If this is a fact , oh how sad that someone would rather be in the streets than at home.Regardless of any changes that comes it is our choices that will shape our future,We live in an imperfect world , but God is not done with us yet , there's always hope for the better if you keep the faith and make" Him "your friend.The title fits the imagery well ,diction,depth and flow is good too.
Love reading this ..Keep writing !
when you get the chance please read my poem " Life is what we make it " and tell me what you think .
Just smile,
Dollzell
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