Hello Jo Painter
I like your poem and found it easy to read. I also like the substance you used in your writing. You did a good Job, keep on writing
lucky dog
HI Rainplot336
I've read your peace, in fact I read it a couple of times. I have not read "O Me O O life" by Walt Whitman, so I'm not sure where to start.
I'm getting the feeling you're expressing some of your thoughts with those of his, but you're moving in a lot of directions. I won't say I fully understand where you're coming from but I think I get the most of where your story is going. Keep on writing
lucky dog
Good Morning hihohyena
I've read your story and it was interesting. It flowed well and was easy to read. I enjoyed it, and look forward seeing more of your writing. I didn't see any grammatical errors, but I'm not the best one to ask, It looked good. Keep on writing
lucky dog
Hi R J Fuller
I've read your story and it was interesting. It was fairly easy to read though I think if you'd put in spacing between paragraphs it would have made it easier. I like your story and plot, giving them something to try to survive. I think you did a good job. Keep on writing
lucky dog
Hi amy-Has
I'm looking around the site and chose yours to look at. I know all about hiatus's since I had been on one. Sharing thoughts on Halloween and wondering whom might come to your door. I've been here for seven years and we don't get any trick or treaters. Most of the families with children go to schools or churches, I believe it's safer.
Have a great Halloween when it comes!
lucky dog
Hi Ambience24
I've completed reading your poem, and I enjoyed it. I think you did a good job and I found it easy to read.
Keep up the work and continue writing
lucky dog
Good Morning Leo
I've completed reading your story and though not a fan of fantasy genre, I found your story interesting. For me it was a little hard to follow all of the characters, but I still enjoyed your story. I hope to keep reading your work. Have a good day!
hello Lucifer
I've read a few poems and sonnets over the years and yours is the first I don't get the meaning of. This is the first philosophical writing I've come across and I'm trying to figure out what you're trying to tell me.
I'm sure the problem is mine so all I can say is keep on writing and I'll check in at another time.
Hi IE
What a gripping story you've told. It was interesting and an easy read. You did a great job, and felt compelled to finish it. You kept my interest all the way through. I have no faults to relate, just joy to have had the pleasure to read it
Lucky Dog
Hi DyxeOri
Your work is thought provoking, an easy to read. I did read it several times to get, (hopefully,) the essence of your work. The mind is a tricky thing that can make you wonder where you are. I can relate!
I started out reading your Forgotten Values and I had a harder time getting through that. That's why I moved on to When Dark and Light Meet. I like your work and I hope you keep it up
Lucky Dog
Hello William McPoetry
I've read your poem and I like it. I had to read it through a few times but (I think) I know where you're coming from. Person or Birds is the question,
Keep up the good work - write on
Lucky Dog
Hello Rainyplot
I've read your story several times over, trying to understand what you're saying. I think you're talking about dreams and thoughts of things around you or a city.
The only discrepancy I found, was the wrong word in the 5th line of 2nd paragraph. The word after multifaceted (Would) should be World (maybe).
I'm not exactly sure what you're trying to convey, but I didn't find it. The problem may be with me, so keep on producing and I hope to check in again sometime. Thank You
Lucky Dog
Hello Uncertainly
I've read your peace but I'm not sure what the meaning is. I'm a senior citizen so forgive me for not giving you a better review. I don't have anything bad to say but because I don't no what you're trying to say, it's hard for me to give a constructive review
I'm sure someone else will get it, but I'm not that person.
Have a. good day and keep on writing
Lucky Dog
HI Amethyst Angel
What a compelling story, I certainly enjoyed your characters and the dialogue. It was well written and easy to read. I hope you continue the good work
Lucky Dog
Good Afternoon True Echo
I've read your essay and find it thought provoking and sincere. I think you need to space your paragraphs to make it easier to read. Your content is good and I'm that great on punctuation and spelling but it looks ok from my untrained eye.
Keep up the good work
Lucky Dog
Hi Naomi - Thought I would come your way since you've giving me a try. I enjoyed your thoughts and word's about happiness and what makes you happy. These are words of wisdom and I like the way you shared your belief. It was an easy read and uplifting. Keep up the good work
Lucky dog
Good Afternoon Jawaz
I've just had the pleasure of reading your story. It was sad but good, and maybe not the ending I was hoping for. Your story was easy to read and flowed well. I find it easier to separate the paragraphs with a space.
I'm not the best when it comes punctuation but it looks pretty good.
You did a good job, and I hope to see more.
Lucky Dog
I'm back Foxtale and I'm glad I checked out your space. You captured the essence of your story with an upbeat flair. Real life makes for good stories, if you can remember them.
Good Job again it was interesting and again an easy read. You captured the feeling of the whole story very well. It's easy to see why tears filled your eyes along with Calypso Man it was very poignant.
Good Morning Foxtale
I've read your story and I found it to be an easy read and enjoyable. Life definitely gives you chances to show what you're made of.
I'm not all that good on commenting on punctuation, but it appears to me that you did a Great Job. I like stories that are paragraphed and yours is.
It was a good story and you did a fantastic job. Keep up the good work
HI Deepak Sagar
I've read your Yellow car and I can understand where you are coming from. It is very easy to let life and our jobs get in the way of family.
Taking the time to enjoy what life is all about.
I think in writing you want to make it easy to read. Putting paragraphs in so you can break it up with a space. That way when you change subjects or a different line of thought, you can put them together. I think that will help.
Keep up the good work, and let stories come out.
Hi Cherhonda
I've read your story In "The Beginning" and like it. I have several suggestions that Might help.
I find it easier to read a story when the paragraphs are separated by a line.
I've been told with some of the work I had previously written and now deleted that I needed to proof read what I wrote. I think that is a good idea for you also.
Sometimes we want to get it "Out there" for people to see and respond too. You need to take your time and produce a good piece of writing. It's all there, you just have to clean it up a little.
Hello Charlie
I had to read your story several times, to get the idea (I think) you're putting out there. I'm not a reader of the macabre and I not sure how to review your work. The wording seemed a little strange to me and made it harder to read than it should have been. I was able to follow your story line but it wasn't smooth. I believe you have the right idea, maybe a little more clarity would help. Best of luck and keep writing.
lucky dog
Mike - I liked your story Madness Over Luna, it was both imaginative and creative. It flowed well and I was follow the story line without any problems. You did a good job
Lucky dog
What a special story, it brought back many memories. I can honestly say I've experienced everything your story holds. I owned a Beatle, I've locked keys in a car, and climbed into my house after being locked out. Thank you for a glimpse into my past, it was good for a few laughs and a walk down memory lane. You did a good job, it was an easy and fast read that was fun!
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