Hi Dragonline
I've read your peace and I agree it's dark. It flows well, and I can the feel the pain. One can't be posesed and loved at the same time or can they? Good job keep on writing
lucky dog
Hi LTWrites
I've read your flash fiction and it's pretty good. It was short but sweet and I enjoyed it. I see flashes of the event as it unfolded.
You did a good job, keep up the good work.
lucky dog
hello Isokarifrancis
Words of Wisdom - short and sweet, it covers most of trepidations of life in general but there are so many more. Good Job keep on writing.
lucky dog
Hello F Birds - I've read your short story and had trouble fully assimilating it. It wasn't an easy read, but I managed to make it to the end. I didn't understand what the box represents and how it works. I'm a senior citizen so maybe I'm not fully understanding what the point is you're trying to get across. Keep writing and keep trying.
lucky dog
Hi WonderousGrace
Happy New Year to you and I hope 2025 turns out to be a winner for you. I've read your peace and enjoyed it. The story line moved along nicely, and was heart felt. I don't have errors or thoughts to improve what you've written. You did a good job and keep on writing.
Hi Mari.lara - I've read you peace, actually I've read it several times, trying to understand what you've written. I think I can see where you are coming from, and I hope I'm getting the correct meaning. I did not see any grammatical errors tho I'm not the best one to point those things out. Your story is different but good, and I hope you keep writing. Best of luck
lucky dog
Hi Purple Holiday Princess
I've read your peace and found it funny and interesting. Nice choice of subject matter, and both of your characters sounded real. You made it enjoyable to read. My only concern was you left me wanting more! You did a good job, so keep on writing
lucky dog
Good Evening Anna
I share your analogy of the word Failure. I've struggled with the same feelings. You encapsulated the feeling one gets when they succumb to those thoughts. Good Job
lucky dog
Hi QueenNormaJean snow
I've read your peace and found interesting and enjoyable. It was easy to ready and flowed superbly. You did a good job. I hope to see more of your imagination in the future.
lucky dog
HI Recardo
I've read your essay and I found it interesting, and enjoyable. Your take on life is somewhat different than mine, but that's what makes the world go around. You did a good job. Keep on writing
Hi snailpebbles
I've read your peace and I did enjoy it, though it's sad. Sorry you had so many disappointments but understand how you've expressed yourself. My only suggestions would be to put a space between paragraphs it makes it easier to read. You might want to put in the quotation marks where someone is speaking to you or you're asking questions. Keep writing!
lucky dog
Hi Ricardo
I've read your essay, and I did enjoy it, and the story flowed well. I think you did a. good job. I don't know that I felt the depth of the passion you wrote about. I seems to be missing something and I can't quite put my finger on it. I'm not being critical, just an observation, and I wish I could let you know what it is. You've got a good peace and I hope you keep writing
Lucky Dog
Hi bmandal7 I enjoyed your story, brought back memories of my progression, but that was a long time ago. You did a good job keep up the good work Keep writing.
lucky dog
Hello Jo Painter
I like your poem and found it easy to read. I also like the substance you used in your writing. You did a good Job, keep on writing
lucky dog
HI Rainplot336
I've read your peace, in fact I read it a couple of times. I have not read "O Me O O life" by Walt Whitman, so I'm not sure where to start.
I'm getting the feeling you're expressing some of your thoughts with those of his, but you're moving in a lot of directions. I won't say I fully understand where you're coming from but I think I get the most of where your story is going. Keep on writing
lucky dog
Good Morning hihohyena
I've read your story and it was interesting. It flowed well and was easy to read. I enjoyed it, and look forward seeing more of your writing. I didn't see any grammatical errors, but I'm not the best one to ask, It looked good. Keep on writing
lucky dog
Hi R J Fuller
I've read your story and it was interesting. It was fairly easy to read though I think if you'd put in spacing between paragraphs it would have made it easier. I like your story and plot, giving them something to try to survive. I think you did a good job. Keep on writing
lucky dog
Hi amy-Has
I'm looking around the site and chose yours to look at. I know all about hiatus's since I had been on one. Sharing thoughts on Halloween and wondering whom might come to your door. I've been here for seven years and we don't get any trick or treaters. Most of the families with children go to schools or churches, I believe it's safer.
Have a great Halloween when it comes!
lucky dog
Hi Ambience24
I've completed reading your poem, and I enjoyed it. I think you did a good job and I found it easy to read.
Keep up the work and continue writing
lucky dog
Good Morning Leo
I've completed reading your story and though not a fan of fantasy genre, I found your story interesting. For me it was a little hard to follow all of the characters, but I still enjoyed your story. I hope to keep reading your work. Have a good day!
hello Lucifer
I've read a few poems and sonnets over the years and yours is the first I don't get the meaning of. This is the first philosophical writing I've come across and I'm trying to figure out what you're trying to tell me.
I'm sure the problem is mine so all I can say is keep on writing and I'll check in at another time.
Hi IE
What a gripping story you've told. It was interesting and an easy read. You did a great job, and felt compelled to finish it. You kept my interest all the way through. I have no faults to relate, just joy to have had the pleasure to read it
Lucky Dog
Hi DyxeOri
Your work is thought provoking, an easy to read. I did read it several times to get, (hopefully,) the essence of your work. The mind is a tricky thing that can make you wonder where you are. I can relate!
I started out reading your Forgotten Values and I had a harder time getting through that. That's why I moved on to When Dark and Light Meet. I like your work and I hope you keep it up
Lucky Dog
Hello William McPoetry
I've read your poem and I like it. I had to read it through a few times but (I think) I know where you're coming from. Person or Birds is the question,
Keep up the good work - write on
Lucky Dog
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