Without using the words "guilt," "blackmail," or "captivity" you put them in the story very persuasively. This was a very good read with a chilling ending.
It is good as is. You might want to do something to help with Bill's transition from a kindly and victimized neighbor who tries to counsel Sandy out of this situation to becoming a killer. Would you be interested in demonstrating that Bill has a pragmatic and ruthless dimension before he decides on the final solution? On the other hand, it may be the abrupt transition that makes the end so chilling.
Fine contribution!
Doug
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