This was an interesting set of Haiku. I loved your choice of words to describe "Ireland". The haiku itself was average, yet beautiful nonetheless. I wold make the suggestion of separating the multiple Haiku with a blank line. Please keep up the good work!
Honestly, this needs a lot of work in grammar and spelling. For example, you have a space between the "a" and "m" in the first sentence. It also should be written 2AM or 2am. You do not spell out the hour in words. I would suggest a lot of proofreading.
This was an interesting poem and it was very beautiful. There is indeed a lot to enjoy about spring. Your descriptions were nicely detailed. I could practically feel the mud between my toes and hear the birds singing. Very nice work! I hope to read more like this.
I thought this was very interesting. I never read Dante's Infernal so I can't comment on that part. However, this explained everything really well. It felt like a Cliff Notes book it was so polished. Now that I've read your item I am more inclined to read the real thing.
This was a very interesting poem. It was very beautiful. It might seem like forever, but peace will indeed come. I love how you express the end days as "birth pangs" for the new age brought by Jesus' return to Earth. Let us keep our lanterns lit as we keep vigilance.
This was a very interesting prose. It is so true life is what we make of it and how we choose to remember it. Each of our "roads" are different in different points in our life as well as from other people. Those we "passed" in life are tough to get over as we may still see their road, but never cross over it again.
This was a very interesting and very beautiful poem. I loved the choice to use the rainbow as it's a sign of one of God's promises. When times are tough, we should look towards God to help us get through those times. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
This was an interesting read. It actually tickled my funny bone and I normally hate satire! I guess that goes to show just how good this was. The part about the voodoo curses was my favorite although I can't say I didn't like the part where your girlfriend caught you messing around.
Really great story! I loved the play off of the musical terminology and how you came up with the different names. I also loved the message of how we are all different, but equally loved. This would be an awfully great story to publish for kids. Keep at it!
This was interesting. The story had many disjointed twists and turns. The word "bus" in "bus saw" should be "buzz". The ending didn't really make any sense. Why the projector and how did the guide get ahead of them without them knowing they were even after the treasure?
This was an interesting and beautiful poem. The topic of nature was a good choice. The rhyming was catchy, especially the last two lines. I liked how you described various different aspects such as the leaves and bees. The title was well chosen as "nature does indeed know best."
Hmm. This was an interesting read. Congratulations on winning third place. I just wanted to mention that this was technically multiple Haiku so they should be separated by an empty space to avoid confusion. I especially liked the part about the "dew". However, what does "pulchritude" mean?
Hmm. This was a very interesting read. I absolutely enjoyed it. I loved the heartfelt message it carried and the timelessness of it's appropriateness. This could be for any person anywhere that is away from home and at anytime, not just Christmastime.
This was a very interesting and enlightening read. I tend to come back and edit my items quite often on WDC. That's why a lot of my items look quite polished. As part of my OCD it gives me great relish knowing how these tiny edits help make my work better over time.
This was an interesting and beautiful haiku. I liked the winter theme. My favorite part was the last line. There is just something about a "winter days dream" that rolls off the tongue in quite the satisfactory manner. I hope you did well in the contest since this was pretty good.
This looks like it will be an interesting read. It sounds like an awfully ambitious project though, so be prepared to see it all the way through. This item should be rated E or ADR instead of 18+ in the same way movie trailers are rated G instead of MA.
Hmm. This was a very interesting read. The rating is way too high though. The poem could not be any more than ADR, as there are no suggestive comments and while the word pistol is mentioned several times, you don't actually portray the suicide itself.
Sounds like your nuts about nuts! You definitely seem to have plans for using them and they sound delicious. It also sounds like you got some good friends. My mom would get ecstatic when my aunt sent her Georgia peaches in the mail. That hasn't happened in a long time.
Hmm. This was an interesting read. I liked the sense of humor you have about your own brain. There is nothing wrong with having fun with your brain's imagination as long as it doesn't get in the way at work time. Visualizing a paperclip as a train was a different view for me.
This was a very interesting read. I enjoyed how you started with a passage from the bible, then asked a question before getting to the "meat", and lastly, finising with another biblical passage. You even made some great points and recounted a personal life story.
Hmm. This was a very interesting read. Some parts felt a little off. For example, the prose was on a very serious note until the end when you used the phrase "see you later alligator". Also, the reference to the bible with "creator's love" being the only true love is incorrect. God also has a "maternal love", a "fatherly love", & many more.
Hmm. This was an interesting read. I liked how you chose the snail mail letter as your subject. It really is true that almost no one sends physical letters anymore and that is just a crying shame. After all, a hand written card means so much more than an email or text.
Hmm. This was a very interesting read. Regret can indeed be a very powerful emotion. It can haunt you your whole life simply because you wish things could have been different, but you know that it never will. This can feel like a very fatal "Catch 22".
Hmm. This was very interesting and very beautiful. The subtle use of wording was very well done and provokes some strong emotions in the reader. Beauty can very well be deceiving in more ways than one. Of course, beauty is also in the eye of the beholder.
Hmm. This was a very interesting and very sad poem. War has truly been devastating to so many people in so many ways. It's especially hard hearing about how it affects those who don't even help support the war such as the very young. Why should they suffer for others greed & hate?
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