I love it! Your descriptions came perfectly into my mind's eye! Matt seems to have learned a good lesson about nature and color attraction. Fitting in can cause some real problems! But luckily for him he has a supportive parent who goes the extra mile.
Zob was not the only master in this tale. Zuk knew just what to say to alter the situation in Zob's favor. Since I adore origin stories, I found this one most enlightening. The concept of how ermine became a royal fur is interesting as well. The humor and clever expressions of Zuk relieved the danger of the situation that presenting the cloak to the new King might have caused. Spin Doctors were alive and well and life-saving even back then. No grammar or spelling errors sullied this work.
I loved it!
This is an excellant overview of the phenomenon of 'cancel culture'. I found it enlightening and thoughtprovoking. The essay was well laid out and written in such a way as to be understandable to most readers. The final summary was clear in pointing out there must be room for individual opinions and viewpoints.
I found it interesting and informative. Excellant work. Best of all, no typo or grammar errors were noted.
This is a very well-rounded and thorough analysis of love. There were a lot of good suggestions about how to show love and accept love. It is extremely interesting if a little dry.
Also it would have helped me read the work if its type was a little bigger. I personally favor 11 or 12 in clear types. Unfortunately, it has a lot do with my age and the condition of my eyes. It would also be a little more readable for me if there had been a few breaks in the writing.
I also found I learned something even after all my years of giving and recieving love, and as Martha Stewart would say, that's a good thing!
Keep up the good work. Practise practise practise! Most of all, spread the love!
Hi Axton Gard: I got an email requesting a review. So here goes. I loved the rhyming and the visuals it gave me. It was remarkably vivid. The only part I found puzzling was that her mother didn't even seem to miss her or demand that be looked for and found. She was solely fixated on a comfortable chair. Children are messy and usually forgiven but parents. But the little girl doubted that she could be turned into a chair and persisted in crossing the line.Methinks that may be the point of the story.
This is a good one! I smiled throughout my reading of it. I wonder if his mom picked that job, or get assigned it? The image of the mom is perfect, especially how she set up his bedroom based on childhood likes. I found no obvious errors and the image of the hot exit door was perfect.
Hi Angus: I believe this might be the first of your tales I've reviewed. I picked a good one! Your Muse is alien-like to me, but why wouldn't he be? I was giggling at your description of him from the start. Seems like he may have you in a bind, and he's got backup. I found no grammar or technical errors and I needed the laugh it gave me. Hope you resolve the impasse for the sake of your writing. It's so amusing and seemingly true, it deserves a few GPs
Wow! I loved this, not only as a lover of the world of Camelot but also as a cat lover! The lure of magic would be strong with this reincarnation of the great wizard. I found it enthralling from the first word to the last.
Hi Luarel: The title of this piece, "The Witch's Game" intrigued me. The action and adventure kept me reading. I would say my favorite part was finding out that Lyra was the niece of Morganna.
Although I found no typos, spelling errors or grammar glitches, I have to admit I found it hard to read as there were no spaces between paragraphs or dialogue.
All in all, a wonderful read,
Good work!
Hi Slam: The title "Why I wear real clothes" caught my eye immediately. It seems like your conjurer has the right idea. When you do large spells daily it seems only prudent to save as much of your arcane pool as you can.
I noticed no spelling errors, but as I read I just kept seeing the whole thing as dialogue. With dialogue, it's important to use " ". In long dialogues, the first paragraph usually has the quotes at the beginning and the end. After that, it is acceptable to put quote marks only at the beginning of each paragraph until you reach the last one, then do as you did with the first paragraph (add a quote at the beginning and one at the end.
It was an interesting read. Keep up the good work.
Hi Phil Thomas: I got so used to reviewing during the anniversary, I decided to keep at it. 'Paris for the Last Time' was a very appropriate title considering what your main character went through. I can understand why he didn't stay in London for long either! I don't travel abroad too much for the same kind of reason. Being stranded in an unfamiliar country where you don't speak the language must be horrendous!
One thing that could have made the story pop, was using some dialogue, even if he was only talking to himself. For instance, "I'll make one last attempt to use the ATM" he muttered." Talking to himself would be just what he would be doing by then!
I found no grammar or spelling errors though.
Good words!
Hello Ry: See what I did there? This was a very touching story, proving that someone older can affect your life so easily. I would put your note at the end in the section where you describe the story(under the title box, when you are entering your story in your port.) It seems obvious to me that you may have done what the main character did at some point. My favorite part was the last two lines:"I did what Ann taught me. I said hello. The idea that Ann's influence will go on in the main character's life is presented successful by him seeing a man on Ann's bench and stopping to say hello. I found no obvious spelling or typo or grammar mistakes.
Both sad and cheering, is the general mood I find in this tale.
A great read!
Hi Jacky: I love this! Especially when the reader finds out that both the husband and wife are trying to pull a fast one on each other. Dan is trying to lie his way out of an affair and Cynthia is using his lover, Tina as a way to clean out the accounts and be gone before her husband gets the divorce papers she left for him. I noticed no spelling, typos or grammar glitches.
Devious!
Hello Prosperous Snow:
At last, a poem I can relate to! It stirred up vivid memories of my own Christmases past and present (except for the fruitcake, never was a favorite in my family.) The pictures this poem makes are wonderful to me!
I enjoyed it enormously!
Hi Beholden: The title of this story so intrigued me, I had to read and review it. I'm sure many people have found themselves hating their birth names. That was the case for Ruby. But fate wasn't done with her yet. She agrees to date a man named Hugh Stoneman, only to find out he also had change his name when he changed his physical appearance. I noticed no spelling, typos or obvious grammar problems.
I really enjoyed this one, good work!
Hello Lesley May in 2195747: I enjoyed this tale of a magic shop. It is well written and I was surprised by the Grandma's practical magic. To encourage him to save his money, she convinced the male customer to use just a drop from a bottle. But the key was, for it to work, he had to stop smoking and drinking. As the white witch explained, once he did those two things he would have the money to get married and even live long enough to see his grandchildren. I found no spelling or grammar errors in my reading.
Well done!
Hi Hazel (1): In my search for something to review, I found your chilling story 'The Art May Take Your Heart'. You were very good at building suspense and horror.
Just a few things you might want to think about. The huge space before the blurb about the artist is distracting because it's so large.
I noticed you did well with the artist's last name, except you used an 'e' instead of 'o' once in the sentence when she realizes the curator is the ghost artist.
In the phrase "nearly faint of fear" you might try 'from' instead of 'of'. In 'feeling very gullible, perhaps 'vulnerable' would flow better than gullible. 'With a face of fear' seems a little awkward. Maybe 'a face full of fear' or a fearful face would work better.
I have to say I write horror but I don't often read it, since I've been known to have nightmares like your young character Milly. But this was one I really enjoyed.
Hi Ruth Draves: Looking something to review, I stumbled across your flash. Boy, can I relate to this character's frustration with the word limit and some prompts! Every now and then I'm stumped for where to go with a prompt too.
It seems the character's frustration is causing some real life problems. She probably shouldn't cook in her state. At least her husband is helpful, not sure why he doesn't finish meal prep for her, I know mine would!
I found the humor relatable and the piece had no obvious grammar or sentence structure glitches. As I write this I'm still smiling especially at the long story short comment by the husband.
So enjoyable, keep writing
Hi amateur40: When I read you weren't getting reviews, I thought I'd stop by.
This poem is very touching and a little sad. The child's spirit was panicking as it didn't understand where it was and thought it should get back its family and friends. I'm a firm believer in the heavenly waiting room.
I have written several stories, one that has an angel character who supervises the waiting room. Gabriel was kind and loving as I picture him to be with all souls but especially with children.
The poem was easy to read and very descriptive. Thank you, I enjoyed it.
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Once upon a time there was a magician named Marvelous Melnish. Everyday, he would appear in a new place and time. But he never stayed long and always disappeared again before he was ready to. Because of that, he was never able to solve his ongoing problem that stemmed from the time he made himself disappear at Carnegie Hall.Until finally, he just gave up and continued to time travel until he could find someone who could help him get back to his own place and time permanently.
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