You are so right! How many poems that I leave homeless and crippled because I won't write them down. I too, see this as a projects for poets: To Rescue the Homeless Poems. You have stated their plight and I hope all the "gifted and endowed will take a few into their hearts and let them flourish. You have inspired me to act. Thank you.
I WISH THAT I HAD SEEN THIS IN OCTOBER; NOW IT IS NOVEMBER. I SEEM TO CHOOSE THE HARD WAY.
THANKS FOR THE ENCOURAGEMENT TO ALL WHO PARTICIPATED. I WILL TRY TO GET INSPIRED SINCE WORDS OF THE FAMILY STORYTELLING ARE ALWAYS WITH ME.
I think that you got such high marks on this poem because it took through life and left us with a powerful end.
For many of us it is the whole truth. You were careful to rhyme every second and fourth line, however, in my reading, I seem to struggle to merge the first and third lines. Of course, it may just be the early morning hour. I really enjoyed the thought and flow of the poem inspite of this problem.
Solitude does give you a certain sympathy for other living things. I am glad you are writer, who must write now. I am glad you chose to write these words on a bench and then here at Writing.Com. You might want to change the word "there" to "their" in first verse. I am sure it is an oversignt.
This is a beautiful poem with beautiful thoughts that lend themselves to the "spoken word". I enjoyed reading it aloud. I am sure that many readers will find it and enjoy it. I especially enjoyed the concluding verse. You must keep contributing to writing.com
Are we living in that time-warp now. I think we are about to get a demonstation. This poem will be hailed as a commentary for this time. It is the best of times and definitely the worst; but we can still laugh. Oblivously, I enjoyed this poem.
What a quirky humor. I get it. It brought a smile to mind. Sometimes you might look at my poem:"Tu Duh COLON'L OF KENTUHKY " Keep writing and entertaining us.
This poem was inspired by a very tasty Bucket of Fried Chicken
I know the essence of this poem. I think that I have been there and now, you have fleshed it out for me. I love the flow and the imagery of the verse. Thank you, for writing these wonderful words and not putting them off for birth at a latter time. For your dilligence, we all benefit.
You describe the scene, the scenery, the emotions and purpose of this story so very well. I was interested in the villian, caused the accident of the car and dog because of stupidity and the hero, who cared and comforted the animal. Surprised and hearten to scene when touched, by Joeseph, the dog seems to live again. I know that animals usually run home and die. I choose to think, this one will live. Why? because I am a writer and I can fix things...
This truly akin to many of us, who write when inspired. I ,too, have wonderful thought pop in mind. Also, I love thinking about gathering beautiful word as Solomon did when he was king. He went gathering word and the saying so that he could ably congregate the people. Even if you were awake and on your feet, I glad you wrote it down. How much is lost because we fail to respond to that nudge when it comes.
Your mind is truly brilliant. I love the way that you think. What I love about the written and spoken word, is that the same ones can be used and re-used in so many varied ways. You use them beautifully in this poem.
Thank you for sharing. I felt that I was taken on an exploration of the mind. Did you ever see the movie "Mind Walk" starring Sam Waterston?
Dear StoryMaster,
I think your suggestion are invaluable by inspiration and reminders. Many, I already was aware of, but either procrastinated or just didn't implement yet. Others gave me insight to what is possible. Thank you.
I am so glad that the friendships of youth are still the same as the sweet memories that I have of introductions over 60 years ago. I usually don't read this kind of story; but I am glad that I took the time to read this story. You, the author left it open for adventures of these two and anticipation of your readers. I am sure that you will garner many youthful readers loyal to Alex and Jake.
Every verse piqued my curiosity as to what the conclusion would bring. You held it together well. I am glad that little star guided you on that hopeless night. Or perhaps this was not your experience. This poem could be about another person whom you may have known. Nevertheless, it ended in hope. I really like the idea of how a single, seemingly insignificant thing can change our live. Even such a turn of events can save us. Some may say: "Thank God, for such insight!"
I am truly sorry about amber and I could feel the lost in your words. However, I do feel there is nothing that happens to us that God won't correct in his own time. Justice demands it. I liked the simplicity of your story told a few well-chosen words. Most of all, you capture all the emotions for yourself and her little girl.
I tried to read this story and got very tired; but couldn't leave it. So I decided to read it as I do most books, last chapter first. I started with the last paragrap and moved upwards. Here is what I found: (1) every paragraph is a complete story within itself. (2) Yet, it works to connect the other going up or down. (3) Our commonality of life's events binds and makes us writers who set the scene of treasured memories. Thank you
Ecfleming
I wish that I could rate this 100 because any number is too low. I am now 70 years old and see it coming for me or my love of 53 years. We can now enjoy each other because our minds and bodies are still sound. I hope that I go first, however. You left me in tears and yet looking ahead to time when no resident will say:
"I am sick." Thank you for sharing.
When you have some time will you read: "She's Up Again" and "She Wants to Leave". I thank writing.com for recommending your work for consideration. Sincerely ecfleming
This one must have been fun to do. You did it well. I liked your subject matter: a child's thoughts. You certainly had plenty of resource material to draw up. I am glad you were inspired.
This left my mind whriling. Why didn't the Dinosaur just eat the cops. If he ran away after eating everything, why was he afraid of the cops. I will just fill in the blanks. Thanks for the workout.
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