Wow! That is great! What an awesome story about the reality of time travel and the paradoxes! I loved everything about this story. I felt I knew and understood the character and the irony of the same noises meaning different things. I am huge believer of perspective and relativity. Excellent story with a great twist that you don't see coming till it's on you. Great mood set with the surroundings and the sounds and sights and the weather as well as the characters countenance. Wouldn't change a thing! Really fantastick read!
This beautiful! I love the flow of the words and the rhyming patterns. Great use of descritive terms. And my favorite the truth of realizing that you are not a victim of any but of self. You really get the feeling and message across. I felt as if this was something I would write. My favorite stanza or quotable quote:
"Drifting in a wasted effort
Haunted by my own demon terrorist"
I can't help but see a rapper reading this. It's very lyrical and musical. Like something Emenem would produce or rap. Excellent read! I love this!
Raw and emtional and I think we've all been there! Nicely written. Great flow and very clearly and cleanly to the point. Conveys almost a mixed message emotionally which I believe is the intent of the author (forgive me if I'm wrong) which helps to drive home the point. My favorite stanza (or quotable quote): Feel free to use me for your pleasure
As long as it's convenient mutually.
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