Hello there
I think this poem is really good in it's central idea especially in the way it ends
I didn't see that coming and that makes it really good
If I could offer a few tips (without you getting offended)
I would say change up your wording eg you use encouragingly, confidently
I also noticed you use the word encourage a lot
Find some fun synonyms that fit with the flow Of the poem and your initial idea.
On the brighter side:
I do like the continuous use of 'the bridge' because everytime it feels like I'm drifting I'm brought back by the two words being repeated
And once again the ending is bang on...the flow is great, idea behind is good and it's just a well written ending
Keep writing
Only well wishes
Revone
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