Horror. This is sheer horror. The tone is extremely dark. I have yet to read the Diaries of Lisa Lansing, yet I have the feeling it'll make me shiver all through the night, like what this poem is doing to me. The first two lines made me think it sounded too grown-up for a twelve-year-old, but the rest of the stanzas can indeed be attributed to a girl that age.
This is a chillingly dark poem. Yet it conveys the expected emotions--maybe more--for a girl in her situation. Plus the picture after the poem adds to the general atmosphere of foreboding.
Short but concise. And in simple, understandable words. This is one amazing poem about the one thing we love to do but could never explain why--writing. And you get the message across.
I took the test using the link--and it was great! I actually realized a lot about myself. As for the poll, it helped me gauged the personalities of most Writing.Com members. This shed light to some of my questions, particularly on why most poems and items are about sadness and despondency. Thank you ever so much for creating this poll (and placing the link!). Cool poll!
Wow! Proving the existence of God through science--what irony! But it does make sense. I'm no scientist--and some jargons are befuddling my brain--but I do understand, or hope to, what you meant. And yes, I agree with your statement that "Certainty of any kind must have roots deeper than the topsoil of our own universe." That has been used for proof of God most of the time, but no one usually understands that. I must admit, your essay had my brain topsy-turvy, but it made my faith stronger. Strange that science took part in building my faith instead of degrading it.
This is great work, partly because of the analysis, and partly because you have just proved to all agnostic out there that scientific theories don't always work against God.
I am not an expert at reviewing or commenting or whatsoever. But somehow, whenever it comes to your poems, it always gets a 5.0 rating. I just can't explain, but I think it's in the emotions, those stiring heartfelt emotions, in your poems that makes me feel a part of what you must be feeling when you wrote them. This poem is full of contrasting emotions, and what is touching is that they're real emotions that really change at the blink of an eye--or, at this instance, at the change of focus of thoughts. This is a moving piece, and it is real in a way that I feel like weeping too!
This is such a heart-stiring poem. And a reminder to all of us that, in exchange for the freedom of the future generations, the men of World War 1 gave their lives, shedding their generation's blood for us. Yet we forget the price they paid. Thank you for reminding me--and each and everyone who reads this--of their sacrifice. The most touching lines are, of course, the last two lines of each stanza.
"It's many years ago....I write these words to all, lest we forget."
This made me cry. I did forget. And now I remembered. And now I am thankful. It is, as you wrote, a "debt I owe I never can repay".
Back to reality (the harsh one):
This is a truly touching poem. And a reminder,as I said above.
This should be published all over the world. Enough said, I guess.
Reading this, I somehow felt it would ruin half the poem's emotion if I rate and review this. But I really have to say it.
This has to be one of the best songs ever written...I can feel my eyes welling up with tears, honestly. I'm a teenager, and that song hits me right where it should: the heart. If only I'll know how to sing this! It is full of emotions, and you can feel those emotions reach out to the reader--and the reader is carried into the world projected by the words (and of course, the author)! This song is really powerful. It has an impact on the reader. You'd want to witness the world as it was portrayed in the 4th stanza. And may we all witness such a world!
Alright, I'll be blunt.
The poem is confusing, especially the line "what does it mean to be me?". I thought I got the meaning but apparently it goes deeper than that. It is quite bewildering, honestly. I don't think I got it. But the "idea" I got was of choosing what is really important to you. If that's the gist of it, then I got the point.
The poem is somewhat baffling to a teenager maybe because we are so used to choosing what is best for our image. But I also find it interesting because it makes you think more deeply, and, like the author, do some soul searching.
This should definitely be published all around the world! This is a poem more than half of the world's population could sympathize with. Cancer has been known to be the top killer in developed countries, and many people do not know how to deal with it. I myself have been near in experiencing its grip on those close to me--and I was unable to stop the fear that crossed my soul.
I am thankful for the words you have written. It showed us that we're not alone in facing such fears.
As for the poem in general, I've noticed this: In most of your poems, the last part is always the best. It holds true on this one! The last stanza really touches the heart and gives a strong conclusion.
I find the poem a touching expression of courage and hope. It is a tribute to those who have suffered in the London bombing.
I am not British, nor am I remotely connected to anyone in London. But I felt a kinship with the English when I heard the news on that fateful day. And I feel it again as I read this poem. This is wonderful. And touching. And an inspiration to all to strive to rebuild that which was destroyed by our enemies...
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