I really like this poem. It speaks to my heart in so many ways as I am a cutter. You write extremely beautiful and with the right choice of words to make the meaning very clear yet hidden at the same time. The only I would say is maybe try to make the poem have some sort of pattern or true rythm to it as that and the meter jump around quite a bit. But over all, this is a very nice poem.
A very interesting poem. May I ask what your muse was for writing this? I like the set up a lot. The slight rhyme scheme adds a bit of mystic to the poem which seems to add to over all alure of it. Overall it was a very enjoyable read.
This was a very interesting poem. I like the depiction of colors and how you set them up to come emotions. The only thing I could possibley see that could be a little off is the pace of the poem. And maybe the next to last line, with how much longer it is than the rest. Over all though, I think it is a very nice poem and a very enjoyable read. Keep up the nice work!
This is very interesting. I think it says a lot about what goes through a teen's mind when they are in the midst of depression. I especially like how you have written the last paragraph. It shows the struggle that we all have with depression and trying not to give in. Keep up the nice work.
Wow! That makes a lot of sense. The only thing I would really say that could be fixed is try to make the rhyming a little bit better in the first stanza. And maybe add a color scheme of some sort. That's about all I can see that would maybe need any fixing. I like the 4-line stanza set-up. Everything flows well. Over all, this is a very nice piece of work. Keep up the nice writing
~SnowTiger
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