Content and Impressions:
Nature and its cycles, this one is seasonal and fitting...
Favourite Things:
Wonderful rhymes and consistant scheme...
Least Favourite things: Moments before evening's death
Even though it works with the cycles of nature in this poem and fits the rhyme well it was a little to pessimistic for me... but I don't suggest you change it, I mean if that's the *worst* thing I could find in this poem... it must be pretty good right?
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Its ok, not the greatest, not the worst but the message is really nice, and has a fitting and powerful ending...
Favourite Things:
The consistancy of the Rhyme Scheme
Least Favourite things:
I dunno if tribute is the right word, it seems to call for reflection, memorial, while highlighting the bad things about him... if it really were a tribute wouldn't it hint at the good stuff too?
In Conclusion:
I kinda feel bad for rating this kinda lowish... the intensity of emotion in this (or rather the dramatic lack of it) makes me want to rate it higher (man I wish there were melancholy/tragedy merit badges or here)
Content and Impressions:
I like this one, sure its a bit abstract but its interesting and enjoyable for the most part...
Favourite Things:
Wonderful Rhymes
Interesting use of words (and word forms) like beauteous and jealousies
Least Favourite things: Hanging in the cradling comfort of a dark sky,
something about the cradling comfort being put together doesn't fit quite right... its nice for Alliteration purposes, but reading it is kind of ... awkward... perhaps its just me?
Content and Impressions:
I normally don't like dark stuff but the structure and some of the words here used are so compelling its wonderful!
Favourite Things: Leaving behind the obsidian kris of Loneliness.
the strong words you used Vanquish, obsidian, selfless
The message and how its hidden between the lines
Least Favourite things:
the darkness, though its appropriate I'm not really into the black...
In Conclusion:
Great peice, the only thing that seemed to be missing, is the daggar slicing the two into one... or perhaps I missed it between the lines too :)
Content and Impressions:
I like the design of this folder, despite the blue (one of my personal fav colours - yellow being the other), which is normally so cold, the picture and style here make it seem so warm and welcoming instead...
Favourite Things:
The description of what poetry is to the author, and how it brings about an ambience...
Least Favourite things:
how the word PAIN was capitalized... I mean emphasis, sure, it just didn't sit well with me that's all... but that's probably a personal issue anyway
In Conclusion:
nice folder, and although I've only read one sofar, I have a feeling its full of some nice poetry!..
Content and Impressions:
This is great, etherial but grounded somehow simultaneously, enjoyable, romantic, its all good!
Favourite Things:
Expressive, the use of metaphors, and various other things. Let’s sit upon our star and forget all else,
Nice opening line, catchy and sets the scene well.
Least Favourite things:
No regularity to the rhyme scheme that I can tell, its not a biggie with this poem from the way its constructed, just would have been nicer if it was regular, I guess...
Content and Impressions:
The authors views on reviewing vs critiquing...
My own personal style: I mostly review poetry and my template that your now seeing is designed in a way that content and impressions is one of the first, this is because I can offer encouragement here, also Favourite things goes before least favourite for the same reason.
I find, as a currently non-professional writer/reviewer that I can offer something I find more useful than technical issues and/or grammar/spelling corrections (although I occasionally do them too, if I notice)
but what I can offer is: honesty... how I really felt about the peice...
In fact I guess I'm only really reviewing this because I felt I had something to say on the issue, so this isn't so much a review more an opinion/discussion what I read...
Favourite Things:
Encouragement, Validation, awesome things to try to convey... I'd much rather receive them from a review than just a bunch of corrections.
Least Favourite things:
That its not set as an essay-type item.
In Conclusion:
Great work, I mean I didn't read it all, (perhaps I was distracted or disinterested in sections) but I found this quite good...
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Awesome message, great poem!... I like so much about this one, the form, the rhyme
Favourite Things:
The rhmyes... always, and the message here is worth listening to...
Least Favourite things:
The rhyme? with die & alive its an awesome contrast and belongs, but the lines don't seem to rhyme at all...
In Conclusion:
Great poem... about how everything is becoming disposable in our lives... in fact... does that mean we're starting to live disposable lives???
Content and Impressions:
Awesome!... I love this one!... I often feel so... imperfect... but then I often say sometimes its the imperfections that make something perfect!
Favourite Things:
The Rhymes and the message... definitely solid in this one.
Least Favourite things:
Nothing much...
In Conclusion:
Great lyrics, I just wish I was hearing the tune to them too!
Content and Impressions:
Aww... I guess your venting or writing this for theraputic reasons...
Favourite Things:
the natural way this reads...
Least Favourite things:
The last line is a little strange, Part of me wants to break the form introduced in the end and leave out the "One day they will realize" chunk, another part thinks it needs to stay.
Content and Impressions:
Interesting good message, nice homely feel...
Favourite Things:
Rhymes, I always like the rhymes! :)
The first stanza and last two I liked the most
Least Favourite things:
The rhyme for, shared and bear wasn't so great...
In Conclusion:
Nice Poem! It gets to the heart of alot of things.... choices aren't always there, and sometimes they're not so black and white to follow....
Content and Impressions:
Yum Yum Scrumptions Yum... if it wasn't a poem I'd eat it!... (and probably end up with diabetes and die happily ever after... Kidding!)
Favourite Things:
The form, I'm a big fan of the Cinquain Form, I'm looking forward to writing some in the future.
Least Favourite things:
There wasn't one!
In Conclusion:
Awesome poem about the nature of... nature...
Content and Impressions:
Perhaps its just me or my mood, that I'm distracted, or I'm not sure what... but as I'm reading this one its just words on a page... their meaning isn't filtering through... or perhaps the light was so high I couldn't reach...
Favourite Things:
Don't be discouraged that I can't think of anything to put here... I honestly believe this poem has some worth... if only I could figure out what it is!
Least Favourite things:
An almost complete lack of punctuation, aside from the stanza's end periods and apostrophe's.
The rhymes also seemed to be in an awkward place instead of finishing the stanzas they start it, but if you place them at the end it gives the recurring line a different spin... catch 22...
In Conclusion:
I'm not sure what to think of this one... honestly...
Content and Impressions:
Grief, difficult subject to write about and explore.
Favourite Things:
The way the form holds up though most of the poem
The fact that there are rhymes in it :)
Least Favourite things:
Some oddities, the first stanza reads similar to a limerick (only with less rhymes)... then the next stanza starts with Remembering which seems like its just too big a word for there in general...
also the line
Searching for someone to trust
Seems like its missing a word, it makes sense, but it doesn't seem to follow the rhythm too well...
In Conclusion:
You did a pretty good job overall it was even as optimistic as appropriate for greif. Nice Peice.
Content and Impressions:
Its got a good message and speaks to writers on a few levels...
Favourite Things: With thoughts overflowing,
Each letter a link
In my chain of thought,
Nice concepts and the chain metaphor was great...
Least Favourite things: I close my mind
And allow it to rest,
perhaps because my mind refuses to close?....
I'm really not sure what else, it's hard to find something really wrong with it yet it doesn't inspire me or make me love it...
I think some more form might help, find a way to use rhymes, repetition or shape to work for you... (heck I could imagine one like this looking like a giant pen somehow!...) ...
In Conclusion:
Nice peice, I really want to rate it higher, I just can't bring myself to in honesty...
Content and Impressions:
Its deep and emotional, two people complex relationship, well complex feelings anyhow...
Favourite Things: but all I ever wanted
was for you to have a place for me.
Least Favourite things:
last line I would have gone with have a place WITH rather than for me...
The line breaks confused me, there's something called enjambment which is a "device" that continue sentences in poems to the next line. Some of it was good but some of it seemed so wrong...
In Conclusion:
Great emotion, good piece, there's grammar issues, you may want to check the order of some sentences... but it has a good message.
Content and Impressions:
This extensive peice is well written and requires astute observation...
I think its one of the most well written things I've read in a while...
its full of comedy, and has extreme depth...
Favourite Things:
lol the length of the peice :)
Least Favourite things:
the aspects that weren't touched on...
In Conclusion:
ROFL.. good for some fun... anyone reading the public review page.. please read the item, I'm sure you won't be disappointed!...
Content and Impressions:
I think this was a great poll question...
Favourite Things:
The question itself... something that people need to think about... how many of us there are, sustainability, and what we're doing to the environment.
Least Favourite things:
I couldn't find an appropriate answer...
I mean it wasn't for me just as simple as yes or no.. and the no description didn't fit my reason... so I havn't yet voted in it!
In Conclusion:
Great Poll and a good question to ask
Content and Impressions:
Hmmm its good, I liked the message... I'm not religious so most of that I reject but that doesn't mean you don't have a good message here...
Favourite Things: I flashed S.O.S signs
This line was strong and really solidified the authors intent.
also the (what I assume is) hyperbole (or is it some kind of metaphor?) about shackles from the feet, getting you ready to fly...
Least Favourite things: I struggled to find a place where I was excepted
Do you mean accepted on the end of the line here?
Also the form and rhymes are quasi there, which confuses me...
theres no distinct regular form through the poem that I can tell
Looking deeper into it, lines per stanza are relatively regular 4-5-4-5-3 is ok...
but the Rhymes don't seem to follow a scheme..
the first stanza is abcc then it moves to ddeff then no rhymes at all..
so its more like ghij, then klmll, and a triolet (I think thats what its called, or something like that...) non
If this was intentionally un-patterned then you can ignore my comments about it... I may have missed the point...
In Conclusion:
I think I've said a whole lot about this one... its a good poem, I just feel it *could* be a lot better...
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