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Awesome if nothing else its an insipiring list of titles, who needs a contest to write poetry from a list like this?... well done, its varied and interesting...
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the way each one suggests creativity and the words used...
Least Favourite things:
not sure there is one...
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Great list!... I hope to see many more wonderful entries to the list in future
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That was soooo good how you did that, I like how you equated Jack and the Beanstalk Jack to the Jack in Jack and Jill and how Mary got the part of Little Miss Muffett (I wonder if Jack was also the Jack from little Jack horner, and that the Mary "strumpet" was the "Quite Contrary" Mary lol) anyhow I'm glad I stumbled across this item after seeing you breifly in chat...
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I've mentioned most of them already...
and of course the inevitable "...Aghhhh!!! Ow! My head! Oooooh..."
also the beginning was a great way to engage the reader...
Least Favourite things:
I searched hard for something and aside from the steam my whey reference that I didn't seem to understand at all, I'm not sure theres anything I could suggest to improve on, perhaps not making it so "adult-oriented" in audience...
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I chuckled at this one, so it had the desired effect being a comedy...
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Some Rhymes would have been nice, and the punctuation was quite sparce... I think it could have done with some more...
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The shape, perhaps it was intended to be jagged lines but it looks to me more like the roof of an asian temple or a christmas tree :) still... thats not a complaint...
Least Favourite things: The whole earth seems to cry out to the heavens
not sure what is meant by this line so much...
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Nature can be Awesome... and often is... if you stop to appreciate it... I like how this poem captured that aspect.
Content and Impressions:
I take it Senryu is a Japanese one, this may be the reason why I like this peice so much. The Alliteration is nice, the only thing it seems to lack is some punctuation, although grammatically its probably unnecessary and being such a short poem it probably isn't a requirement, I just feel a comma here or a semicolon there might enhance something like this... it would possibly also work towards accentuate the line breaks...
Favourite Things: and capture our soul.
Ironically how it breaks from the previous alliteration is interesting and I like that device (one of my poems "I've got the key to your heart" was built around the concept of 'breaking' the rhyme.)
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Its hard to find one in such a short peice, I think, the form itself would be my greatest letdown here mostly because its one that has no rhyme but that is, of course, personal preference.
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Great work, nice peice, perhaps your footprints will leave a trail to follow...
Content and Impressions:
Interesting spin on war... I agree that people are better of home, we need more love in the world, just not more people (its overcrowded with us parasites known as homo sapiens)
Favourite Things:
They don't have the right body armor
Least Favourite things:
Our government doesn't seem to care
Oh they care alright, but probably about the wrong things... more like money, greed, or other things...
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I guess you can tell by now I have other spins on it... but I don't support war either, I hope one day we will learn how to get along...
Content and Impressions:
This is great, full of insight, it captures the sense of disconnection, and I guess some kind of... greif?... over what will never be...
Favourite Things:
Sense unmade for his is a world unique;
Note: I also believe the author tries to make it only his world thats unique... but truth is each of our worlds are... the separation here is just markedly different...
Least Favourite things:
Well, as always I like Rhyme in poems, but its not a necessity for a poem to rhyme, and I'm not so sure it would fit in this still some more structure/form would be good unless it was intentional and a parallel to show it without such additional form???
In Conclusion:
Awesome reading, It sounds like it was painful to write... but I guess theraputic at the same time...
Content and Impressions:
Theres a scientific side of me that just wants to reject this whole peice... like where its asked where clouds come from... as in where they're made...
But this is really nice to read it works well and is rhythmic, its also creative/artistic and just plain enjoyable.
Favourite Things:
I don't think I've ever seen the word Unbidden before... and if I have I can't recall..
Least Favourite things:
the rhyme between begin and men
Content and Impressions:
Interesting, not much that made sense but I think thats part of the Alliteration restriction, it depends on the contest organizer/judges as to how much Alliteration they wanted, I found recently Alliteration is often meant to be subtle rather than "forced" lots of words starting with the same letter can too easily become a tongue-twister... (its on reason how things like Peter Piper Picked a peck of Pickled Peppers works so well)
Favourite Things:
That some of the language was above my vocab levels, words I assume are strong like lachrymal, libidinous and Lilium (unless the last was intended as a name, I'm not certain)...
also a curiousity latently lazy (wouldn't that mean active until the latent period is over...)
Least Favourite things:
Lana Ladyslipper
the name sounds way to contrived to me... but then perhaps its plausible I wouldn't exactly know...
In conclusion my rating might be quite harsh depending on the requirements or lack thereof stated in the contest this item is for
Content and Impressions:
Here is something thats wonderful, its the fullest most honest blog I've seen, but then I'm not sure thats saying much because although I started one I havn't ventured far through blogsville as yet... still this one is remarkable ...
Favourite Things:
The sheer amount of content and the personality behind it...
Awesome, I love this in out!.... Humerous, involving, it's great fun... bright and colourful too, lots of good lines already there I wish you well for its future, so simple yet effective...
(note: I haven't yet posted here but I'm intending to someday soon...)
Awesome poem, I love the fantasy Genre and how its so fairly represented here Royalty, Faeries, Kings, Wizards, etc its optomistic too... which is nice to see
It has presentation and punctuation and the odd rhyme or two (I would have preferred a few more)... anyhow... still very nice peice, its the kind of Fantasy poem I would be looking for if I were looking for one....
You've already said all the words I need to describe this, most of them strong, soulful and powerful in your poem... not only is the Alliteration masterful, but of course theres even rhyme, consistency and punctuation...
hehe funny, either that or nice attempt at philosophy... not quite sure... ever heard of solipsism?... still nice shape to the poem, nice perspective too, its called AI, but I wan't quite sure if you were talking about a person viewing the AI (which I doubt was your intention) or the AI program's perspective of the outside world...
PS: Also being a programmer, I know for a fact a computer doesn't behave that way... at least not yet....
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