This is a very nice poem. I especially like the last verse. It was very touching. There are a couple instances where i think some wording could be changed. Line 4: instead of In the morning, I feel very disgraced. How about: In the morning, I feel dismissed. Line 10: instead of In a December cold breeze. How about: In December's cold breeze. Overall, good poem.
I would like to comment on your poem. I love things that make me feel and when I finished your poem, I felt a rush of emotion spread throughout my body. I don't know anyone with a child that has autism, but I do have a cousin with a different outlook on life (just a better way to say it). The love is still there for her always. I commend you on your use of words. My favorite line : A place we cannot go, he cannot leave.
This is a great poem and I really like. If I could make a suggestion. There are some parts in this poem that have periods, I feel that if more commons were placed throughtout this poem it would read very smoothly. Other than that this is a great poem and I love your concept and theme.
I think that this would make a great song. It sounds to me like it would be set to a rock tune. Something more in tune with a Creed or Godsmack track. The only suggestion that I would have is tha you use the Should a child wake, live in a nightmare? through That hides from us every child as it dies? somewhere again in this song.
Excellent. I am a big fan of horror, and your poem makes my skin crawl. So that is a good response. The way that you use your words in this poem created a image for me to see everything that you conveyed. The title is what struck me the most, I was scrolling dowm the page and I just had to see what it was about. Great use of words.
Excellent poem. It is exactly as you said. The story is told throughout the poem, and the reader had no choice but to sit there and enjoy it. I am not familiar with this type of poetry, but I enjoyed it just the same. I hope that I have enough talent in myself to write a piece this captivating.
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