I enjoyed this short story very much. It was well written and engaging. I liked General Havoc very much. I would enjoy seeing more of him and seeing what he does next.Even though this was written for a contest, I'd enjoy reading a longer version of this story with added details and expanded world building.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It's certainly a different perspective on Alice and Wonderland. I like that you drew inspiration from the books themselves.
I enjoyed this poem very much. I like the descriptions you used. It certainly painted a picture in my head of what the poem's talking about. The rhyming was well done and thought out. I also got a sense of how much you'd like to visit Colorado Springs.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It's well written and descriptive. The rhyme scheme is well done. I like how in the first stanza you rhymed dune and moon. They're words that rhyme without being spelled similarly. People often don't think of those particular words when they're trying to rhyme. Good job.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It's thought-provoking to try and figure out what's being described in the poem. My guess is that the poem is describing the ocean as it breaks upon either a beach or below a cliff.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It's rather spooky .which I like. The little animation of the steps is a nice touch that I enjoyed. It added to the spookiness of the poem. I'm a little confused by the lines having different colors. It's still a very good poem.
I enjoyed this little folk song. Being of Irish descent myself, this appeals to my sense of Irishness. It's well-written and I could easily picture things in my head. It works very well as both a song and poem. I would very much enjoy listening to this set to music.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It brings the warmth of Thanksgiving to life well and in only a few stanzas. It also used a form of poetry that I'd never heard of before. It almost reminds me of a Haiku, though this form is longer and the syllable counts are different. I got to enjoy a new poem and I've got a new poem form to try out.
I enjoyed this short piece very much. It's well written, descriptive piece of writing. Though I'm not sure if it was your intention,is also a bit of humor in this piece as , until the last line, the piece could be about almost anything. That might just be me though. I still enjoyed it.
This was an interesting take on hunting from one hunter's perspective. I enjoyed this story very much. I did notice ,however, that you didn't capitalize the first letter in any of the sentences. This was the only thing I noticed that could be fixed.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It was a beautifully written poem about a watching the birds as winter comes. I'm glad you included the author's note at the bottom about the Junco. It's a type of sparrow that I've never heard of and I was glad to have learned something.
The story certainly took an unexpected turn at the end of the story. I wasn't expecting the main character to be a vampire. I did enjoy reading the story very much. I'd like to see a longer version of this with more story and detail. I like the fact that the main character has a deal with what seems to be the local undertaker. That's definitely an interesting facet to the story.
I enjoyed this story very much. It was an interesting take on the wild west gunslinger. I enjoyed the character very much, particularly the gunslinger himself. I think this would work as a longer story, with some added detail. I still thoroughly enjoyed it and I'd enjoy seeing more stories about these characters and the town of Purgatory.
This is a sweet little story and I enjoyed it. It talks about falling in love in a way that doesn't always happen in real life. I did notice a few little mistakes. In the first paragraph, the word "realized" should be "realize". In the first, second, third and fourth paragraphs , there are several first person "I"s that aren't capitalized when they should be. In the fourth paragraph, the first letter of the last name isn't capitalized. Also, there are points where there are commas that don't quite seem to make sense to me and places where a period would work better. However, that may simply be they way it sounds to my ears.
I enjoyed this story, though it was not what I expected when I first read the title. I was mildly confused as to exactly what was going on. However, that doesn't detract from the story. There's quite a bit that can be read between the lines. There's detail but not a large amount as this seems to be a snippet of something larger.
I enjoyed this little story. Dreams, and nightmares in particular, can leave one wondering, "what the heck?". Nightmares can disturb sleep to the point where you can't sleep. The description of the nightmare was well-written to pull the fear and bring the fear for the readers. Well-done.
Predators are often the most misunderstood members of the animal kingdom. Though predators are feared, they often represent many things, like courage and strength. If not for predators, other animals might become too numerous. I enjoyed this perspective on predators.
I enjoyed this poem very much. There are times when goodbye isn't necessary or another word or phrase would work better to express what's going one. There's an emotion to this poem that is plain. I'm not sure if it's happy or sad. It might even be both. It's still a beautiful poem.
This was an adorable little story with a different take on Alice in Wonderland and I enjoyed it very much. Having babysat when younger, I can understand Debbie's slight exasperation at trying to keep her young charge entertained. I do think the section where Debbie tells Julie the story could be a little longer and more like a story, but this was a very good little story.
This was a beautifully written poem about a person looking into the eyes of someone the love. I've never heard of this particular poem form, but it works well for your poem. I like how you expressed the love of the other and the wish to linger in the eyes of the other person in so few lines and without using certain words that are often used in love poems. Very good job.
This is a poem about loss that is short and to the point, which works quite well for your poem. With shorter poems, it can sometimes be difficult to express what you want to express but you expressed what you wanted to express well and in only a few lines.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It’s cohesive and well-written. It paints definite images of camping out in a place where you can see all the stars. I can picture getting so lost watching the stars and constellations that I lose track of time and suddenly its morning. For me, this poem inspires stories about adventure out in the wild places of the world, and what ifs about adventures out among the stars. It evokes a sense of the serene calm of getting away from the craziness of a stressful week (or couple of weeks) and recharge your batteries. It’s a beautifully written poem that I will definitely be adding this to my favorites so that I can read it again after a stressful week. Keep up the good work.
Your article was highly informative and I learned something today. I’ve never heard of this particular fruit, most likely because it’s not sold in the US as far as I know. I also learned that the durian is an important part of Malaysian culture. I’m not sure I’d enjoy eating this particular fruit, however. Since I work at a supermarket, I’ve seen a wide variety of different fruits and vegetables that are very unique but this was a new one. Thanks for the informative, well-written article.
This is a beautiful and well written poem about the clash of nature. Each verse represents the beginning, middle and end of the story. There is a definite image conjured in my mind of the fight between the two sides. This poem is a good example of how well a poem can work without rhyme. Rhyme isn’t necessary for a poem to be good or for it to speak to the imagination, though many poems do rhyme. I enjoyed this poem very much. It’s an interesting look at a storm rolling in on a sunny day. It was very enjoyable.
I enjoyed how you used the letters of each word as the first letter of the first word in the line. I also liked how when read down, those letters spell the title of the poem. that was an interesting choice that made the poem unique. It's something I never thought of. I also enjoyed the images you made with the word choice. I could definitely picture it in my head. I did notice one thing. In the sixteenth line, you used the word axes instead of axis but that was the only thing I noticed.
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