What a wonderful little piece :) When the poem started I thought "Oh no, not another cheesy poem about a relationship" and as I read on, lines like "my views are old fashioned, i call you my honey" made me think it was leading to some message about gender roles in relationships, but boy was I missing the point. I agree completely, being a caffeine addict myself. I definitely know what you're talking about :) The rhymes were well chosen, the content was delivered well and I like that you've used the colour of coffee itself to present the poem in. Well done and keep it up :D
From this short chapter alone, I can tell this is not going to be an entirely happy tale. Despite the grammar and spelling errors throughout, I was moved by the opening to your story and I will keep reading these as you release them. Thank you for sharing your story. My condolences.
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