I'm not big on hockey, but it seemed well done to me. I think you started off a little rough though. The coaches speech in the beginning seemed a little cheesy. The description during the part with Andrew in goal and needing to get back to make the save was very good I thought. I felt as if I could imagine it happening in my head.
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