Even though I am only twenty-two years old, this is BY FAR the best piece of writing I have ever read. I agree with this 100%, that technology has already gone way to far and developed way to fast and like I said I'm only twenty-two and I just can't keep up. I never thought about a world wide internet virus happening until I read this, and I bet something like that could easily happen! If this were published I highly bet that it would be a top seller!
I really like this. I love the words you chose they were to the point. I really like and agree with the line where you say " The more phony, the more accepted." These days this is true.
"Make a valid statement of uncertainty found because, at this point, your artificial affection is getting old" My opinion I think it sounds better if you leave out "because." Just a thought.
Nice job
I really liked the line "The secret kept closed, until the end told."
I think this would sound good also, "The secret kept closed, until the end when told."
Nice job
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