Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us. I agree with much of what you write. Being thankful on a regular basis is good for us and our mental well-being. The church or temple community reinforces the need for continual gratitude.
For me Thanksgiving is better than Christmas, no worry about pleasing others, relaxing, overeating good food you don't normally have. It's a nice break from the working world, time with family and friends. Now that much shopping is done online, the sales the day after aren't that attractive. Some of us don't have the money for shopping, so our attitude doesn't change on Friday.
I have tried the gratitude journal you mentioned. It is worthwhile.
Good blog entry.
Found you on Read & Review. Nice story. Eventually, one of the generations rebels and asks, "Why do I want your keepsake?" The creepy reaction rang true.
The only criticism I have is I didn't get the 4th paragraph. "Sort of look on her face wasn't clear. I had to read it several times to understand the girl's facial expression silently asked her dad if it was ok.
Very good for flash fiction.
Hi, found this on Read & Review. Well done. No suggestions for changes or corrections. My favorite line was "not the echoes of what others demand". Great encouragement. Sound appears to be the most important sense here.
Great job. Let's see more.
This was mesmerizing. I had to read it twice to be sure I understood the story. It was a little scary. Yet it contained some tender insights.
Great descriptions. You did a lovely job. No suggestions for changes or corrections.
Give us more.
Came up in Read and review-good timing.
I love your tribute to veterans. your rhythm was smooth, even for free verse. You rhymed very well.
The images and feelings were very clear. Great message of respect and gratitude.
Good job.
Greetings. Found this on Read & Review. Timely, since Sunday is All Saints Day. Churches will be remembering everyone who has passed this last year. So that was on my mind as I read this, which started as a tribute to someone.
Losing someone does make us turn contemplative. We think of the past. Our lives seem so short, so fleeting. You captured the essence of that mood.
No suggestions for changes. Well done. Keep up the good work.
Hello. This was on Read and Review. What a story. I couldn't quit reading. I felt bad for the investors who didn't have all the info they needed.
Well written. I found no errors and have no suggestions.
This flash fiction looks like it had some word requirements, since some words are still highlighted.
Good job. I enjoyed your story.
I came across this on R & R. I hope I'm not intruding into the contest deadline. It was a very cute poem. Could be a better explanation for Elf on the Shelf, not just getting by, but to keep on trying for your best. Maybe a new take on the old adage, "If at first you don't succeed. . ."
Good job.
On Read & Review. I don't know what the contest rules were or anything about this type of poem. To me, it appears flawless. I liked it. It rang so true. Great job.
Sorry, I can't give a fitting review.
From Read & Review. I don't know if this was for a contest and might have had some restraints.
The subject is beautiful. I understand the sentiment. The message you bring is a sublime one. The rhyme is good. There are no typos or other technical errors.
However, the rhythm is a little off. Religious poems frequently become hymns, so you might try making up a little tune while you say the words out loud. The result might be a more consistent rhythm from stanza to stanza.
A very good effort. You express your feelings very well on a difficult subject (so many people have tried). Keep writing about your faith. It is worthy of art at its best.
Good story. What every woman should read if she doesn't want to cook and knows her husband can!
It caught my attention immediately and I had to keep reading. Good use of dialogue and descriptions.
I found no typos and have no suggestions for changes or correctons.
Good job.
The first, maybe only, distraction is the "Wh" on a line by itself to start. Presumably a typo.
Otherwise, it was informative. I had no idea fanny packs were back. The only ones I ever encountered were not fashionable, but were very lightweight, sometimes rain-proof.
I never had one myself. After reading your article, I think maybe I need one. A lot of old people need one to carry a cell phone, a house key or whatever, when doing yard work or taking a walk. Just in case. I always have a phone nearby in case I fall off a ladder or trip and hit the ground. A fanny pack would give me some assurance.
You do a good selling job. I am sure I use a lot of outdated items.
Very cute. I liked it. I had to keep reading to find out the end. "Don't" in front of any thing almost always works with kids. I did wonder how many times the mom had to do that.
No suggestions for improvements or editing.
fI like your poem. This Free verse says a lot in limited words, a good sign of poetry.
It has an air of dignity and pride. It was a pleasure to read something positive. a lovely tribute to veterans of all ages.
Hi, I found this in Read & Review.
It plays with colors, shadow and light. I like that. Excellent job of capturing memories, maybe fleeting or blurry.
My favorite line was "that burnt orange orb".
I hope you did well, if this was for a contest.
Ok, you got me. I didn't remember a villanelle. I had to look it up. I had already noticed your rhyme scheme, so I knew you met the requirements when I read them. In fact, you met all the other requirements for a villanelle. (I didn't notice until later that you referenced it with a drop down note. I've been educated a bit.
The imagery is consistent and mystical. Great job.
Hello.
I liked your poem. Great imagery, It truly depicts a spectacular display. good word choices. Brings to mind a few pageants I've seen, including the mall in D.C.
I found no errors, no recommendations. Thanks for giving a reference to the rondeau; it was helpful.
From read & review.
I read it several times. I was ok until that last line. I wanted that dive to be perfect or almost. "Oh No!!!" scared me. Did the poet die or become severely injured or just disappointed in his performance?
I think breath should be breathe. I see you just wrote it, so it just needs editing.
Good description. Good poem.
The “hanging line” caught my eye. I thought of ropes and lunging. But I digress. Good poem, so true. I’m sure we could add more verses. Thanks for posting this week.
Ok, a delightful Halloween poem that isn't sing-song-y like many seasonal poems. I enjoyed it. I didn't notice any flaws or possible changes. The imagery is good. It was a well chosen title.
Nice job.
Found this on Read & Review.
It's bouncy and cheery. The form suits the mood and contributes the gladness of the changing seasons. The only thing bad about spring is pollen, which is necessary for nature, but not our sinuses. In my region, spring is too short. Cold weather turns to too hot way to soon.
Technical aspects: the rhythm is a little bumpy. Otherwise, good mechanics are employed.
Well done.
Hi, I am reading this poem out of season because it came up on Read & Review.
It paints a realistic picture of a town or subdivision on Halloween. It brings to mind that in this modern, high tech world, we still have a throw back to simpler old world traditions. But I digress.
Nicely written. A lot of money and forethought go into celebrating this holiday, and you captured an image of that without getting didactic.
I have no corrections or suggestions. Good job.
I understand the point of view. A person wants to help someone down on his or her luck. It could be too much to handle; the homeless person could be lying, playing the system, or off balance. I have known such a person, who simply couldn't be helped.
Your poem was well done, proofed very well, and maintained interest.
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