I have to say that this is beautiful! The imagery you have created of the dragon and vines in the forrest is incredible. You've captured the air of awe and wisdom about the dragon perfectly and have created a very clear atmosphere. I like the tone at the begnning when the old guy is talking to someone younger and the speech matches the age that the story is supposed to be set in. I would have liked a bit more action but I apreciate that this is only the introduction of possibly more stories.
In the 3rd paragraph you've put flees, and I think you meant flee, but apart from that your spelling and grammar is brilliant, which is really nice to see.
I hope you do write some more of these adventures, with more action and fire-breathing. You have a real talent! Nice one! :)
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