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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on A Drawn Out Passing on your site. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

*Check2* Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I was immediately struck emotionally by this poem.

*Check2* Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter (as applicable):
The rhyme, not that I know alot about poetry, fit this piece beautifully. It didn't need to rhyme to be good.

*Check2* Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I felt the writer in each verse and saw exactly what he was describing.

*Check2* Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:
The spelling, mechanics and grammar were spot on.


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I don't have any on this. It was really a nice poem that spoke so highly of his ex-wife's father, Bill. What a lovely way to honor him.

Thank you for sharing your poem. Keep writing!
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Review of Rainy Day Walk  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Apondia,

What a lovely story. Your descriptive writing held me all the way through. I really felt like I was there with you in the rain. Can't wait to read more of your adventures.

Have a wonderful day!
Andrea
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I honestly love SCIFI. I loved the whole premise of this story. You are a genius with words and it was so engaging. The whole talk show idea was really a great one.

I loved it and would not change a thing. Thank you for all your hard work and for paying attention to detail here.
Keep writing,
Andrea
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Review of Forever & Always  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I was going to use the review tool but this poem just didn't fit. It was gripping right from the start and was so engaging. You really nailed the feeling here. I would change nothing in this and would only say... Keep writing!
Loved it!
Andrea
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Review of That Chair There  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I accepted your request to review your poem. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

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I felt that this poem hit the ground running and never had the reader look back. It was engaging all the way through.

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It was well-structured and rhymed perfectly. The rhythm of it was perfect. It never skipped a beat. Not a bump at all in it.

*Check2* Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I felt like this really could be a Dr. Seuss book. The imagination that this poem possesses is really like what Dr. Seuss writes.

*Check2* Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:
I see no grammatical, spelling, or mechanical errors within this poem.

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I have only one suggestion. Please get this poem into a children's book. I know that it will be very successful. I love it and I just know that any kid would as well. Thank you for choosing me to review this. Quite enjoyable.


Keep writing! :)
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Review of Anger  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jinxx.

I could relate to each of these lines as it impinged when I was younger. It is difficult to be in a family, to begin with, and then to have to stay silent and not express is another thing entirely.

I hope that things are better now since 2008. Sending you wishes for a prosperous New Year. :) I hope to read more from your portfolio in this new year.

Keep Writing!
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Review of Lies  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Another side of love that is ugly and real. You say it like it is and as painful as it was to read I am sure it was equally hard to write. I admire you for putting this down in words and sharing your pain with us all.

You summed up the loss so simply and so strongly. Loved all your verses here and your usage of swearing. It fit perfectly.

Keep writing!
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Review of Forever  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well for a short poem this packs a lot of punch and incite. I don't know if anyone can really answer this question fully. I know that you broaching it here will provoke thought which is what a writer intentions should be with their prose.

You have left two hanging questions... the second line ensues that something happens as the clock keeps ticking and the days keep changing.. what changes? I like you are leaving these both up to the reader. But not answering them within the context you are engaging the reader with your poem.

Great idea. Really amazing three lines! Keep writing!
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
How truly clever is this! Really enjoyed all the music references and how you fit them all in. Still can't believe all the songs that you included here.

I found this an enjoyable read and almost could see it as a song in itself. Might be fun to try. lol! Great writing and quite remarkable really.

Can't wait to read more from your portfolio. Keep writing!
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Review of Still Here  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh this was a real tear-jerker but so good! Every word rang into my heart and I could feel Charlotte's pain watching her mom. I loved this story and its message.

What a great lead-up to the cardinal and such detail on packing up the food. Good lead-in on "Might even enjoy it more if it was something off your own line ... " That was brilliant.

I honestly like the way this is written. The start with the dog was the best way to begin such a story.

Keep writing!
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your story on Read and Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

*Check2* Overall Impression:
Really real story. We have all been this person so it was very relatable.

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A great story about changing one's habits and enjoying the peacefulness of the morning.

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This was told from Mary's POV. We could feel Mary's anguish at first when she was about to hit the snooze button.

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Great setup on the story. We knew exactly where she was and what was happening as she got up. It was like we were there.

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Mary was the character and she was clearly defined here in this story.

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No dialog was needed the description was all we needed to guide us through the story. Show don't tell was perfectly used here.

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No errors in grammar or mechanics.

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Keep writing more on this. I want to know more about what she facing on this day. Why she got up early this time? This story made me want to know more about Mary. Great job!

Thank you for sharing your story. Keep writing!
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Review of A Summer Quest  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh man! What a great story and so full of love and adventure. From the moment that he got on that plane to running around from place to place looking for that treasure, I was hooked line and sinker! Really loved the whole premise and how she came up with this to keep him busy and could have a great memory to take back with him.
I was actually tearing up when it was disclosed that it was her that set it all up. I would actually have done the same. Thank you for such a wholesome story with a wonderful ending. Just love those. In a world already full of sadness and anger, I love the WDC world the best!

Keep writing! Loved it! Loved your story and loved being your secret Santa. :)
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Review of GOOD STUFF!  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
From the moment I started to read this I was already laughing. The man in this was so dumb and so without a clue that it couldn't be that she just up and died and he didn't even notice it. But he really is that dumb and what a funny way to go after saying all those things about him "always being there for her."
This was a great story with such a funny ending. I really wasn't expecting it from the title which was a great surprise. So glad I stumbled upon this one and will enjoy reading more from your portfolio.

Keep writing!
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This was hilarious all the way to the end. I honestly didn't see this ending coming and thought you were dun fer. lol! I had a short stay as a child in NC and know the humor in most states is ok until your not a native, then out you go on your keister through those swinging gates. :)

I liked how this story continue and kept my attention throughout. The jokes to start it off was a great idea and set the pace. Couldn't stop laughing at the end which is to say what it was supposed to do. So good job. Loved it!

Keep writing!
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Review of CLEARLY ESTRANGED  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read and Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

*Check2* Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Sadness. Moving and real raw emotion from the poet.

*Check2* Form, Format, Rhyme, and Meter (as applicable):
The format was sound and moved each line to the next.

*Check2* Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This was where this poem shined the most. The descriptions ex. piece of furniture, unraveling.. that was really great imagery. One could see this happening in the wind.

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Nothing to fix in this area.

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Was a bit confused with lines 1,2, and 3. Then I saw the footnote which then made it more moving that one shouldn't believe in love.

Thank you for sharing your poem. Keep writing!
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Review of Memories Of Stone  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I found your poem on Read and Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

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Moving. I felt what the poet was feeling when I read this.

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The form was something I have not seen before. The lines seem to get longer and longer as it went on. There was no rhyme but for the type of poem it was rhyming wasn't needed. The message spoke through every line.

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You could feel the voice of the poet as it conveyed the pain of losing someone they loved.

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I would possibly make the i's in your poem capital. It was hard to go past them without not thinking that they should be capitalized. But this is my own preference. Other than that I see no grammar, spelling, or mechanical errors.

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I love the way you expressed yourself in this poem.

Thank you for sharing your poem. Keep writing!
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
OMG seriously riveting. Could not stop reading. :)

This was truly unexpected but sort of not. You lead the reader just enough to want to find out what the heck was in those containers. Each "gift" he gave her was more disturbing than the other. I had a strange feeling that these containers were the icing on the cake.

I loved the mystery of this story. Don't know how you came up with this idea but it truly was off-the-wall good. Oh and the 12 containers each containing the head of a redhead... now that was quite an ending indeed.

Great writing. I honestly can't wait to read more from your portfolio. Wonderful suspense.
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Review of The Farm  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was seriously well-written. :) Each line is placed perfectly and rhymes all the way through. Not a single section was repeated but had another viewpoint to share about the farm. It took me back to my days on my mamaw and papaw's farm. Loved each line for it all hit home. Almost to the core at times especially the selling of the farm..went through that as well.

I really liked this and will look forward to looking at more of your poetry in your portfolio. Thank you for sharing your memories. You doing so brought my good ones back as well.

Keep writing!
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Review of When I Write  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on By Online Authors. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

*Check2* Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
It was really well done and not only the rhyming kept me reading but the pictures as well.

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The rhyming was perfect throughout. So descriptive.

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The imagery was spot on in the poem. The poet's voice was very prevalent throughout especially using the bold and colored type.

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I see no grammar, spelling, or mechanical errors in this poem.

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No suggestions for improvement. I have to say though that your use of the prompt was really amazing! And you made poetry look fun. :)

Thank you for sharing your poem. Keep writing!
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Review of Know How to Stand  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I just love this song! I loved it the minute it came out and honestly anything with Rascal Flatts has me cheering and inspired.

Your honesty about what this song means to you was touching, to say the least. It seems as though it brought in you the best and gave you hope. Your description of your life was a story all in and of itself and adding the song only made it more gripping. I am happy to hear that you are doing better and shooting for some goals in your life and also in your writing.

Thank you for posting this song, I needed to hear it today (It's Monday here, and ugh not liking rain and wind either) But more importantly thank you for your candidness about your life and what you went through. Everyone has a story and I am so glad you are telling yours.

Keep writing!
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Review of A Sea of Words  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found your poem on By Online Authors. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

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Loved this. I am sucker for the sea. So this was right up my alley.

*Check2* Form, Format, Rhyme, and Meter (as applicable):
Very unique format. No need for rhyme it was perfect just the way it is. I have never seen a form like this but it totally worked for this kind of poetry.

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Very descriptive. Love that the love of the sea came out from the writer as well.

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I found no grammar, spelling, or mechanical errors.

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Honestly, loved it. Love the whole mermaid thing, the writing on flattened seaweed and references throughout about the sea. :) Can't wait to read more from your portfolio.

Thank you for sharing your poem. Keep writing!
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
WOW! Music and writing. My two very favorite things. Really brilliant idea taking a song and making it into present day material things. Liked your ingenuity. And the camaraderie between these two were great from the start. It was like we were sitting there watching this all occur.

I do love happy endings. Glad they stayed together. :)
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Princess Megan Rose,

I might be one in billion people that never read Pride and Prejudice or saw the film... but after reading this I am honestly going to one or the other or both! That is how much I liked this. You did an incredible job putting the reader right there with you at each step. You made it real by writing in the first person. This is truly what brought it to life.

I really loved Mr. Crafty and how you brought him back at the end. This is great writing! Can't wait to read more. :)

PS. I saw this line: I am just lpain Jane.
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Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Honestly, loved this. Was going to use the review tool but thought twice and decided to put my own feelings into this write-up. I loved the rhyming, and the way it spoke to my heart from start to finish. Each word was perfectly placed and created this lovely read.

Thank you for writing such a heartfelt poem. You are truly gifted. :)
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Review of For her  Open in new Window.
Review by andiprescott Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I found your poem on Read and Review. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.

*Check2* Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
A wonderful tribute to a friend. Lucky to have you in their life that is for sure!

*Check2* Form, Format, Rhyme, and Meter (as applicable):
This poem had no rhyming which was fitting for it didn't need to. I found the lines very descriptive and moving which is a tribute to the format.

*Check2* Artistic Voice and Imagery:
I felt the sincerity in this poem to her friend. She sounds lovely and someone everyone would love to have in their life.

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There were some bumps but the message came through and we know how the writer feels about this incredible friend.

*Check2* Suggestions:
I would only suggest to read a few of these lines and making some of the words plural so that they don't stop the reader:
She's beautiful /focuses/people's/learns to lead a life
Also, I think you mean "Take them for a ride to heart for overthinking?" Wasn't sure but thought I mention it.

I would love to read more from your portfolio. I like this form of poetry.

Thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!
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