Good attempt although it is a prologue so maybe you need to save the description of him for a later chapter. Describe him a little but don't give too much away
Wow this is good and I can't wait to read the next chapter. I gave you a three point five because there were a few mistakes in there. Other than that you kept me going and I can't wait until the next chapter
Wow this was awesome and it makes you think too that the world would be better off without technology but sadly everyone is the into the latest electronically device and the latest technology that they have forgotten that there are more things out there than just technology/ I loved this and I am going to share it on my facebook page for everyone to read. I also think that you need to get this published too because I think it will be a best seller.
Great read although I would have liked to know where that sound came from and what it was. But other than that I could picture the apartment being a mess as you tried to find it. Had me smiling. Great job
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