This piece greatly impressed me. Honestly, I can't really find much with it that I can suggest changing. There are a few small things, but nothing greatly important.
If I see two people during the night when I go for a brew or to use the loo then it I consider it a social night
In this line, I'd suggest taking the "it" before "I" out.
You mention the abbreviation "COW" a few times. It might look better if you put a period between each letter so it looks like this, "C.O.W." Otherwise, I literally imagine someone being refferred to as a cow, and it takes away from the serious terror of the piece.
You mention that the disease the son dies of is SIDS. I don't think the piece requires an explanation of what the disease is, but I did find myself a little curious about it.
Other than that, this short horror tale is wonderful and quite a bit creepy. It's hard to make me feel unnerved as I am an avid horror writer/reader, but this piece put me on edge.
I think part of what worked is that your voice in the story, quick and abrupt, adds to the tension that the narrator is feeling. It was a great touch. Nice job. And yes, the ending makes perfect sense, but what does the word "sudah" mean?
P.S. please think about taking a look at my forum for horror writers and joining my contest. Love to have you there.
-Matt
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