I like it!! I'm not really sure why, but I had a little trouble getting caught into your story...once I did, however, I greatly enjoyed it! Perhaps beginning the story when Marc walks in would help--I don't know. I loved the twist at the end, and had no idea it was coming--good job!! I'm not going to say your story is perfect--most aren't, but I will say you did a good job!
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