I really like this story. I was getting so into it. You did a good job of making it easy for me to picture everything in my head. I'm almost jealous, Jack sounds hot. I can't wait to see what happens next. Oh, the possiblities! The friends remind me of mines.
Haha, this story was awesome. My favorite line "because you are not a gaty porn star." Genius, I say. You should have mentioned her not so great first name...Patrice. Or I could just be saying that I don't like her now, for what she did to Thomas. He sounds like a nice guy. Overall, I really liked the story. A little far-fetched but I think it just added to the comedy.
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