Haha, this is cute. You did well in the writing itself, for the short story is easy to understand. I could picture a scene like this in a cartoon or live-action family movie. I found this to be a nice read.
Squirrels at times can be funny creatures. Once, in my backyard, there were two squirrels playing around a piece of wood on something that rose and fell like a see-saw. Yeah, I like squirrels. I even got lucky and took a polaroid picture of one. I still have that in a photo album somewhere!
Wow, this is really good! Definitely truthful, and well written. That's quite a vocabulary for a read! "Our assassin is ourselves" - that's deep. I can actually understand that. Since many have allowed themselves to be conformed into the collective herd, and I'm even aware of the many who allowed those awful microchip implants to be injected into their bodies.
You've got a steady rhyming, although I believe the greatest thing about your poem here is its message.
Many of us shouldn't want anything to do with an Orwellian World, NOR zombie apocalypse. I am doing all I can to influence positive change in humanity myself.
I think I will invite you to my group. We info-warriors must network together to resist the fascists.
Yay I did it! It's nice to come across another FF7 fan. Well done in putting this together. It actually took me time to look hard and find everything on the list.
I've been an avid watcher of this show for so long... Good search! It was actually sort of challenging to find all the words. Some of them stared back at me almost instantly. It's a good balance. Good job!
I love this musical, and I found this crossword a bit challenging. I got almost all of them. Couldn't figure out 13 Down. Good job in putting this together. I'll have to see the musical again sometime. Maybe after that I'll get all the answers right. :)
I like this! As I was reading, I pictured myself going through a dark tunnel towards the light, for a brief moment. The message is true, and I don't think there's anything you should change. It's well written. Well done, my friend.
Powerful, and emotional. It does sadden me at times, to know that there are families who split up, and family who just can't treat their kids right at all. If only humanity could improve and be better than a bunch of problematic and/or greedy fools...
Haha!! This is great. Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. lol, yeah Trump is just as bad as those other politicians. I enjoy the way you wrote this. The "Arica" towards the end - that's really clever!
This is really good! I get what you mean here, since I have seen water droplets roll down freely when it comes to riding in a car or bus. Nice use of imagery. Good luck in the Contest. If you'd like to see my entry...
This is quite a read! I liked how you personified the tree here, and the imagery is well described... I wouldn't know if an oak would know of God or not, to be honest, but it's still an interesting final sentence.
May I suggest editing and varying in punctuation? This entire monologue, the feel of it feels a little monotonous to me. During the storm, for example, you could have italicized and use exclamations for the oak to express a sort of distress, if not fear.
This is good, but this could be a little more greater! Thanks for letting me know about your story.
I found your monologue here enjoyable. I've never read anything like this before. I even relate to this, somewhat! When I have writer's block, I search hard in my mind to grasp at something before coming up short - and then I just move on and wait until something comes to me. (Sometimes, the greatest ideas come out of nowhere. Strange how that works!)
My favorite part has to be when Donna tries to write herself, and thinks up the Transsexual bison idea. That gave me a good chuckle.
Is that quote based on a real one? It's pretty good!
Keep on writing! I'll see your other stories eventually.
I'm surprised no one has rated or reviewed this, after much time has passed.
This deserves a five star rating... Dubya sure did leave us in a hole back in the way early 2000's! In my honest opinion, the only great thing about 9/11 was that it woke up a bunch of people. A handful have looked at the different aspects of that event, and passed the knowledge on for others to gain.
This is really well written. I like how you used the different fonts to represent the two characters in this poem.
"Oh wake up, Laura! It’s long lost!
I’m in the crapper! There’s no cost!
My name is mud! My honor’s spent!
My score’s down 82 percent!"
That's my favorite part, haha.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme goes well. There's a great satirical flair that presents itself here. I find this oldie of yours brilliant, and I'm adding it to my favorites. I'll be sure to remember you, and read more of your writings soon-ish.
Awww, this is overall lovely. Adorable! Although, poor Cat... The rhyming scheme is nice. The pacing to the melody is right on. I love both cats and horses. They're such wonderful, intelligent animals.
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That's all right though. I'm glad to know the poll I did is a good idea by seeing someone else do it. 
I already did two, based on books that I've read in the past. I'll want to do another one sometime.
