You have just cartured my heart! I too suffer these remarks from some very insensitive people. I have even had people laugh at me when I proudly comment that I have gained ten pounds, and oh how them comments do hurt. I weigh 95 pounds by no fault of my own. I eat endlessly, but cannot gain the weight! It is SO embarrassing to have to go look in the children's section for clothes because they look like children,s clothes! I feel the same way you do about being thin being a curse! I've even had people say I'm on crack, an anorexic, and a whole range of things I must be doing to be so skinny. I feel badly for people who are obese, but people must open their eyes and see skinniness as the other evil so to speak. It's not fun at all, and it actually lowers my self esteem. I can give you a few ideas that might help you find clothes that will fit properly without looking like children's clothing. I wear Bongos(size 1, size 3 will be big), Levis has our size also(I buy the size 4, or 7 Jr. slims), and Jordache (5/6, Jordache run a little small, so a 5/6 fits). Shirts are a little easier to get because of the new ex-tra smalls or small. Good luck too you with the weight-gainer nasty stuff you're using. I myself buy the chocolate ovaltine, vanilla ice cream, and my chioce of topping. These taste good. Thank you for sharing your story with me also. Sincerely, Inner-Peace
This is so awesome! I love all the colors you used, the time and effort that went into the tags, and the wonderful message it displays! Write on, and right on! Always, Inner-Peace
Your folder of nature related poetry is so very awesome! I will definately come back and look for new additions to this folder! I am putting you in my favorites! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
This is a folder with very promising poems in it. I'd like to come by every so often and read more of the poetry you have added. But, I do strongly urge you to type them without the caps. Your work looks neater that way, and is easier on the reader's eyes. Keep on writing and creating! Always, Inner-Peace
WOW! AWESOME! I loved this couplet. You done a good job with it. It will be better without the caps. Caps are seen as screaming, not to mention it is hard on the eyes. But, on the poem itself, you done a wonderful job on it. I have listed a word below that puzzeled me some though
ANGES
Were you intending the word to be anger instead of anges?
This one is better because it was done without the caps. That allowed me to see the wording and form. Both were great! It's always hard to say goodbye to someone you love, and you captured that emotion here in this poem. Again, you had no grammatical errors, and the wording you used allowed the poem to flow smoothly! Great job! Keep on with the great job on writing! Inner-Peace
This is a very good poem, filled with emotion, and loneliness. Again though, I'd lose the caps. The poem will be neater, and easier on the reader's eyes. I like the way you worded your feelings in this poem. You didn't have any grammatical errors, or misspelled words. Let me know when you have redone it without the caps on, and I'll review it again. Keep up the great job you're doing with your writing! Always, Inner-Peace
Hello Gypsy, first, the biggest suggestion I have is to write this in small letters except where capitalization is needed. It's hard on the reader's eyes.
WHEN I SHALL DIE,
WHEN MY BODY SHALL DIE,
THEN .....
THEN...
Here I would use only one of the words then as you done with the rest of the poem.
The poem itself carries alot of impact by expressing dispair. The form is good also. This poem has alot of emotion, and once you redo it without the caps on, it'll be even better. Thank you for stopping by "Invalid Item" . Come back anytime you want. Keep on writing and creating! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
You are one gifted lady Lexis! This one brought tears to my eyes because I, too, had once felt the same things your poem talks about. The form is awesome and the flow is great! I love how you repeated the last line of the first stanza! It adds such depth to the poem! This one makes the fourth one I've read, and I cannot decide which one I like the best. They are all so beautiful! Now I see why you host a poetry contest! Keep on writing and creating these! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
Bravo!! Yet another moving poem Lexis! You write the most beautiful spiritual poems I have read! Once again, the flow is smooth, and the rhythm is great! On a personal note, I applaud you for the things you wrote about. I'm referring to things you were asking for forgiveness from. Such as gossiping about others, being hateful to others, and being greedy. I look up to you for knowing these things are wrong. Great job, and keep up the terrific job you're doing on your writing! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
Another simply spectacularly written poem about God! It invokes thought from the reader as to if his/her soul is saved. You have very good flow and rhythm in this poem. You are truly gifted my friend! With writing poems like this, I am sure God is very pleased with you for spreading His word! Keep up the magnificant job you are doing with your writing! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
Oh my goodness! You had goosebumps on my skin with this one. What a beautiful poem this is! I love the rhyming scheme, and the even flow of words. This poem carries a very, very strong impact on it's reader. It relays the message that God is there for us in our darkest hour. Thanks for writing this, and sharing it with all of us. Sincerely, Inner-Peace
You done an awesome job on this triolet! This is one poetry form I have just started trying to do. It's not an easy poetry form. It's very easy to mess up. Keep up the awesome job you're doing with your writing! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
This is an awesome contest! Your prompts are very good because they allow for a wide range of choices. Way to go on creating the contest and prompts! Keep up the great job you are doing here for the community! Sincerely, Inner-Peace
This story has a lot of potiental to be a great story. As it stands at this moment, it left me wondering what's going to happen next? So, the suspense level is great. But the ending fizziled for me. I'd like to see you add onto this, or change up the ending a little bit. Below I have listed mistakes I seen. Most of them could have been a typo. One other thing I'd like to say is to proof read your story, and look for missing commas. I seen a few places. Other than that, the story is good! Keep up the great job, and welcome to writing.com! We're glad to have you. Sincerely, Inner-Peace
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I love this story! I applaud you for having the strength and courage it took to write about this very painful and traumatic event in your life. But, most of all, I give you a standing ovation for turning a tragedy into a triumph! I'd like to thank you for sharing this with me, and showing me that anybody can turn a negative into a positive as long as they set their mind to do it. I'm glad I've had the chance to met you. Keep up the wonderful job you are doing! Always, Joy
LOL! Very funny and amuzing story! I so totally loved it. I have three sons of my own, and I remember all to well how my husband "played" with them! Most of the time I wondered how they didn't kill each other! I didn't see any grammatical error, and the story is well written! Great job! Keep up the creative and enjoyable writing you are doing! Always, Inner-Peace
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Hello, I loved this story! Yes, although your story is fictional, I have had days like that! I laughed so hard I had moose tears running down my cheeks! I could see you laying on that ground all curled up like a beetle bug! LOL! Great story and good luck in the contest! Thanks for entering! Inner-Peace
*giving a standing ovation* GREAT job! You've done an AWESOME job with the form, and the flow! I love the improvements because, although I had FELT it the way it was before, the impact is even greater now! I know that others who critique this poem will have small suggestions, but, hunny, there's not too much they can change about this beautiful poem! CONGRATS!!! Inner-Peace
Hiya, I have got to laugh! This story brought some much needed laughter to my day! Thanks for the wonderful story! And, man, what a mean kitty! OUCH! That's for the victims. LOL! Well, I seen a few things and wanted to let you know where they are, so I copied and pasted them below. One was a stutter of the word across and the other was an absence of a comma. You may want to look over this story for commas that are missing. Ok? Once again, thanks for a wonderful story! Inner-Peace
This is in the fifth paragraph.
looked like somebody had taken a charcoal pencil and drawn a line across across
This is in the 9th paragraph.
The man met my eyes and smiled which was very pleasant, but I had seen Spider's move and knew the warning signs.
I feel for our veterans, and the people who have lived the horrible life of war! My brother in law was a vietnam veteran, and had been affected by Agent Orange. He suffered horribly the rest of his life, and died way to young. I pray for peace in all people's lives. Thank you for sharing this story. Keep on writing and creating! Inner-Peace
This is a very sweet and powerful poem. I like reading about a love like yours and your husband's. I know that you have been through so very much this year, and I hope things get better for you. We are all here for you whenever you just want to talk. Inner-Peace
As I said, you need to give yourself credit. I too, question my ability in writing poetry, but I think you're correct about there being a different meaning for each poet. I like prose as much as I do sonnets. As long as the poem holds beauty, and impacts my feelings with that beauty, I consider it to be the perfect poem. Keep up the great job my friend! Inner-Peace
Ahhh! I love this poem. I too, like how you used the prompts for this poem. My interest to read your poem came from a review I seen on the review page. The rythum and ryhming scheme are great! I have one question though. Did you follow the prompt completely with the word moonlight instead of "moon"? Great job none the less. Inner-Peace
LOL! I love this! Wonderful surprise ending! I was expecting the main focus to be a human, and didn't think about a CAT! Great job here Bill! Inner-Peace
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I feel badly for people who are obese, but people must open their eyes and see skinniness as the other evil so to speak. It's not fun at all, and it actually lowers my self esteem. I can give you a few ideas that might help you find clothes that will fit properly without looking like children's clothing. I wear Bongos(size 1, size 3 will be big), Levis has our size also(I buy the size 4, or 7 Jr. slims), and Jordache (5/6, Jordache run a little small, so a 5/6 fits). Shirts are a little easier to get because of the new ex-tra smalls or small. Good luck too you with the weight-gainer nasty stuff you're using. I myself buy the chocolate ovaltine, vanilla ice cream, and my chioce of topping. These taste good. Thank you for sharing your story with me also. Sincerely, Inner-Peace 
Were you intending the word to be anger instead of anges? 
Other than that, the story is good! Keep up the great job, and welcome to writing.com! We're glad to have you. Sincerely, Inner-Peace
Always, Inner-Peace
Ok? Once again, thanks for a wonderful story! Inner-Peace